Broken Ivy
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Ongoing28m
Last published Sun, Jul 28, 2013
Author's Note: The following you will read is something which I wrote a few years back, so the writing will be a bit rough. No, I am not writing anything at the moment and will likely not continue Broken Ivy either. I just thought I'd share this with you guys after I fished the document out the other day. Might as well display it out in all its glory since I did put time and effort on it! I must say, at the time, I was quite pleased with my work and it really was one of my proudest achievements during Year 7/8. Enjoy reading! I do remember writing more than this but can't seem to find it. I will try to search for the rest later!
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PS, TO ALL CRITIQUERS: please, no generalized comments. I do not want vague critiques, nor do I want just a repeat of stuff I have gathered from previous critiques.
So please, do not write anything of the following on my chapter because I will assume you have just copied from someone else's critique:
1)my grammar and spelling are perfect 2)Chapter length too long 3)descriptions=purple prose
You may mention all 3 in one little paragraph, but do not let that dominate your entire critique please. I'd rather you give me one solid constructive criticism than just a bunch of stuff that have clearly been taken from other comments, which shows you have definitely not read my chapter properly.
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