Fury Unleashed

Hey guys! So, I'm deciding to post my historical fiction that I wrote for my English class on here. I feel as if I did a pretty good job in writing this but I just want your opinion. Please comment below to tell me what you think.

Also, here is a brief summary of the event that I chose for my historical fiction:
It takes place during World War II and it is right after the Japanese bomb Pearl Harbor. The Americans start to mistrust the Japanese-Americans and revoke their privileges. In the end, things become so bad for the Japanese-Americans that they are send to internment camps. My story is told from one such Japanese-American who faces this predicament. She also has to deal with her arguing parents.

Also, this is written by V who is @TheDamBlueCookie. Don't worry, @airbarnabus and I will write a story together at some point.