Mass Effect: Galaxy at War [PREVIEW]

This is a preview of my upcoming Mass Effect series to replace my canceled Mass Effect: Retaliation series. Give me your opinions on the preview to help make the actual series better when it comes out. Any advise or criticism is welcomed

(Mass Effect: Galaxy at War is a fanfic following the Destroy ending of Mass Effect 3 based on the decisions of my own personalized Commander Shepard) (Tali/Male Shep) (All rights to the Mass Effect game series belong to Bioware and EA. Only the storyline and some original characters in the series belong to me. The cover pic came from Google. I don't know the artist but thanks to them too for making the picture i used for the cover)