The Burning Candle

I do realize this is not what Wattpad is intended for, but nonetheless I'm going to use it for something that may not be its intended purpose. I'm writing a story called The Burning Candle. It follows the Shane and Davian as they go to a world that is filled with danger. Shane is sad and empty and is in dire need for purpose. Davian is a man that died without a purpose and anyone to know he was gone. Davian sees Shane in a state that he was long before he died, and wants to help him not suffer the same fate he did; therefor Davian takes him to world completely different from their's. It's filled with danger and corruption by spirits filled with hate; but somewhere there is the reason Shane is on the earth. Which will lead to then embarking on a quest to save the hallows (the people of that world) now this is not a full story, it's merely a small paragraph from it. The reason I'm putting it on here is because I want to see if anyone thinks it's good, so if you could comment your thoughts that would be greatly appreciated. If a few people like it, then I will put the story up when I've finished it. Thank you, and I hope you enjoy, thank you.