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This is my story for my English assessment. this copy is before the draft. I have included the final afterwards.
We are learning about fantasy writing and our word limit is 400-600
Let me just tell you this assessment of Fantasy writing was hard with such a minuscule word limit, i honestly like to have a bigger word capacity because as you can see, the events are really squished and it ruins the story (in my opinion).
BTW- i know i am not the best writer so please don't criticize my work, negatively.
. Hope you enjoy
- Alana
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