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DISCLAIMER: These review/critique things are based on first impressions. I will NOT be reading the entirety of your book. My purpose is to urge my clients to learn something new about their story. (Though opinions may vary across participants.) Maybe your review from me will be the catalyst that makes you quit writing for a period of time. Maybe my review is the confidence boost you need in order to take that next step. Maybe my review will help you see your errors and better yourself. Maybe it will do nothing to help you at all and you'll just think of me as a turd after. My goal is not to tell you how to think; I am just a milk dud trying to do something semi-productive as I procrastinate away. Also, in no way am I implying that I am a superior writer to any of my clients, I'm just bored & have attained a decent critical eye on picking out "the bad", I think. We all have written garbage before (you might be writing one right now and have yet to realize it! Who knows-- let me help you find out!), this is just a process that has been done a googolplex amount of times throughout the centuries and the multiverse. This is not unique to only you. It is just a cycle, and you are part of it, which is why I am here to shove you along in one tiny portion of it. If you think that I'm a "rude bitch", all of this seems too intimidating, or maybe even melodramatic--I get it. To a certain extent, I even agree with you! You know yourself better than I do. Remember: no one is forcing you to request and I'll have less reviews to get to. 🤷🏾♂️
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❗❗❗ A T T E N T I O N ❗❗❗ THIS BOOK IS UNDER EDITING AND THE AUTHOR WILL UPDATE IT'S TITLES AND CONTENTS!!! PLEASE NEVER MIND THE NOTIFICATIONS THAT THIS BOOK UPDATED!!! WE ARE JUST EDITING GRAMMAR, SPELLING ERRORS AND MAKING MINOR CHANGES!!! ◆ G U I D A N C E / L E G E N D ◆ *(M/n) - Male name/Your name *(L/n) - Last name *(H/c) - Hair color *(H/l) - Hair length *(S/c) - Skin color *(F/c) - Favorite color *(A/c) - Another color *(F/f) - Favorite food *(F/d) - Favorite drink ●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•● ★ C O N T E N T S ★ *Male character x Male reader *Author x Male reader *Character x Male reader x Author *Oc x Male reader ●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•● ♠ G E N R E ♠ *Fluff/Cute/Lovey dovey *Lemon/Smut/Lime *Angst/Sad *Gore/Death/Horror *Comedy/Random/Crack ●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•● ♂ O N L Y Y A O I ♂ [Well duh bitches...] ●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•● ∅ W A R N I N G ∅ ● UPDATES WILL BE SLOW ● [And I mean it really slow update bruh...] ● SHITTY EDITING ● [And I really fucking mean it!!!] ●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•● ✒ S T A R T E D W R I T I N G ✒ October 13, 2015 ✒ E N D E D W R I T I N G ✒ August 30, 2017 ---------- Text copyright © ShadowOfTheFoxdemon ™ 2015-2017Complete
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Hello! If you're reading this, you're in desperate need of someone to review and critique your book in a fair and honest way. I get it; I needed that too. I have been writing for most of my life. I think somewhere around 8 - 9 years or so. I have worked tirelessly to craft my style, my character writing, and even have sold my books to numerous people for profit. I love to review and read new things, and I've decided to branch out from my comfort zone to try and help as many younger authors as possible. Not trying to flex, I'm just showing anyone new to the game why I feel qualified to scrutinize your work, and why you might like my input. Simply put, I am experienced - have a professional editor - and want to pass what I've been taught down to you. Whatever depth you want - even if you are just looking to promote a work - I'll try my best to be fair and nice. I won't call anything trash, I won't be unnecessarily harsh or nasty. Depending on where you are on your journey, I'll try to give you advice that I hope stops you from making mistakes I did early on. Send me your biggest books, your longest chapters! I am here for a challenge and a good time. Signing off - Ifweallfell
❗❗❗ A T T E N T I O N ❗❗❗ THIS BOOK IS UNDER EDITING AND THE AUTHOR WILL UPDATE IT'S TITLES AND CONTENTS!!! PLEASE NEVER MIND THE NOTIFICATIONS THAT THIS BOOK UPDATED!!! WE ARE JUST EDITING GRAMMAR, SPELLING ERRORS AND MAKING MINOR CHANGES!!! ◆ G U I D A N C E / L E G E N D ◆ *(M/n) - Male name/Your name *(L/n) - Last name *(H/c) - Hair color *(H/l) - Hair length *(S/c) - Skin color *(F/c) - Favorite color *(A/c) - Another color *(F/f) - Favorite food *(F/d) - Favorite drink ●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•● ★ C O N T E N T S ★ *Male character x Male reader *Author x Male reader *Character x Male reader x Author *Oc x Male reader ●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•● ♠ G E N R E ♠ *Fluff/Cute/Lovey dovey *Lemon/Smut/Lime *Angst/Sad *Gore/Death/Horror *Comedy/Random/Crack ●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•● ♂ O N L Y Y A O I ♂ [Well duh bitches...] ●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•● ∅ W A R N I N G ∅ ● UPDATES WILL BE SLOW ● [And I mean it really slow update bruh...] ● SHITTY EDITING ● [And I really fucking mean it!!!] ●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•●•● ✒ S T A R T E D W R I T I N G ✒ October 13, 2015 ✒ E N D E D W R I T I N G ✒ August 30, 2017 ---------- Text copyright © ShadowOfTheFoxdemon ™ 2015-2017
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