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𝐖𝐡𝐢𝐬𝐩𝐞𝐫𝐬 𝐎𝐟 𝐃𝐞𝐬𝐢𝐫𝐞 - 𝐌𝐚𝐭𝐭𝐡𝐞𝐨 𝐑𝐢𝐝𝐝𝐥𝐞 𝐱 𝐑𝐞𝐚𝐝𝐞𝐫
𝐘/𝐧 𝐒𝐧𝐚𝐩𝐞. 𝐎𝐧𝐜𝐞 𝐫𝐢𝐝𝐢𝐜𝐮𝐥𝐞𝐝 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐥𝐨𝐚𝐭𝐡𝐞𝐝 𝐛𝐲 𝐡𝐞𝐫 𝐒𝐥𝐲𝐭𝐡𝐞𝐫𝐢𝐧 𝐩𝐞𝐞𝐫𝐬 𝐭𝐮𝐫𝐧𝐬 𝐢𝐧𝐭𝐨 𝐭𝐡𝐞 '𝐒𝐥𝐲𝐭𝐡𝐞𝐫𝐢𝐧 𝐏𝐫𝐢𝐧𝐜𝐞𝐬𝐬' 𝐚𝐟𝐭𝐞𝐫 𝐚 𝐬𝐮𝐦𝐦𝐞𝐫 𝐭𝐡𝐚𝐭 𝐛𝐥𝐞𝐬𝐬𝐞𝐝 𝐡𝐞𝐫 𝐝𝐞𝐚𝐫𝐥𝐲. 𝐅𝐫𝐢𝐞𝐧𝐝𝐬 𝐭𝐮𝐫𝐧 𝐭𝐨 𝐟𝐨𝐞, 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐮𝐧𝐞𝐱𝐩𝐞𝐜𝐭𝐞𝐝 𝐛𝐨𝐧𝐝𝐬 𝐟𝐨𝐫𝐦. 𝐓𝐡𝐞 𝐥𝐢𝐧𝐞 𝐨𝐟 𝐝𝐚𝐫𝐤 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐥𝐢𝐠𝐡𝐭 𝐢𝐬 𝐭𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐝𝐞𝐝 𝐰𝐢𝐭𝐡 𝐥𝐢𝐭𝐭𝐥𝐞 𝐜𝐚𝐮𝐭𝐢𝐨𝐧. ᠃ ⚘᠂ ⚘ ˚ ⚘ ᠂ ⚘ ᠃ ᴀʟʟ ᴄʜᴀᴘᴛᴇʀꜱ ᴀʀᴇ (roughly) 2000-3500 ᴡᴏʀᴅꜱ <3 ᴛʜɪꜱ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ɪꜱ ᴀ ᴡᴏʀᴋ ɪɴ ᴘʀᴏɢʀᴇꜱꜱ!! ᠃ ⚘᠂ ⚘ ˚ ⚘ ᠂ ⚘ ᠃ Started: 01/11/2023 Completed: ~~/~~/~~~~ ᠃ ⚘᠂ ⚘ ˚ ⚘ ᠂ ⚘ ᠃ I do not own any of these characters a part from Y/n! Credits go to JK Rowling and yasmineamaro for the characters used in this fan fiction! The storyline is original by me <3 ᠃ ⚘᠂ ⚘ ˚ ⚘ ᠂ ⚘ ᠃ ©n1ghtmar3XD 2023
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"ᴵ'ᵐ ⁿᵒᵗ ᵗʰᵉ ᵍᵒᵒᵈ ᵍᵘʸ ˢⁱᵉⁿⁿᵃ, ʳᵉᵐᵉᵐᵇᵉʳ ᵗʰᵃᵗ. ᴵ ᵈᵒ ʷʰᵃᵗ ᴵ ʷᵃⁿᵗ, ᴵ ᵗᵃᵏᵉ ʷʰᵃᵗ ᴵ ʷᵃⁿᵗ. ᴬⁿᵈ ᴵ ʷᵃⁿᵗ ʸᵒᵘ." 𝘚𝘪𝘦𝘯𝘯𝘢 𝘸𝘢𝘴 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘭𝘢𝘴𝘵 𝘰𝘯𝘦 𝘴𝘵𝘢𝘯𝘥𝘪𝘯𝘨. 𝘏𝘦 𝘵𝘰𝘰𝘬 𝘦𝘷𝘦𝘳𝘺𝘵𝘩𝘪𝘯𝘨 𝘢𝘸𝘢𝘺 𝘧𝘳𝘰𝘮 𝘩𝘦𝘳, 𝘦𝘷𝘦𝘳𝘺 𝘴𝘪𝘯𝘨𝘭𝘦 𝘱𝘦𝘳𝘴𝘰𝘯 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘩𝘢𝘴 𝘦𝘷𝘦𝘳 𝘭𝘰𝘷𝘦𝘥. 𝘌𝘷𝘦𝘳 𝘴𝘪𝘯𝘤𝘦 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘭𝘢𝘴𝘵 𝘰𝘯𝘦 𝘥𝘪𝘦𝘥 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘴𝘸𝘰𝘳𝘦 𝘵𝘩𝘢𝘵 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘸𝘰𝘶𝘭𝘥 𝘦𝘯𝘥 𝘩𝘪𝘮. 𝘐𝘵 𝘸𝘢𝘴𝘯'𝘵 𝘢𝘴 𝘦𝘢𝘴𝘺 𝘢𝘴 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘩𝘰𝘱𝘦𝘥, 𝘦𝘴𝘱𝘦𝘤𝘪𝘢𝘭𝘭𝘺 𝘯𝘰𝘵 𝘸𝘩𝘦𝘯 𝘩𝘪𝘴 𝘴𝘰𝘯 𝘤𝘢𝘮𝘦 𝘪𝘯𝘵𝘰 𝘩𝘦𝘳 𝘭𝘪𝘧𝘦. 𝘉𝘶𝘵 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘯𝘦𝘷𝘦𝘳 𝘸𝘰𝘶𝘭𝘥'𝘷𝘦 𝘵𝘩𝘰𝘶𝘨𝘩𝘵 𝘵𝘩𝘢𝘵 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘴𝘰𝘯 𝘰𝘧 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘥𝘦𝘷𝘪𝘭 𝘩𝘢𝘥 𝘩𝘪𝘴 𝘰𝘸𝘯 𝘱𝘭𝘢𝘯... ᴍᴀᴛᴛʜᴇᴏ ʀɪᴅᴅʟᴇ x ꜰᴇᴍ ᴏᴄ 𝐓𝐖: 𝐒𝐞𝐱𝐮𝐚𝐥 𝐚𝐛𝐮𝐬𝐞/𝐚𝐬𝐬𝐮𝐚𝐥𝐭, 𝐚𝐥𝐜𝐨𝐡𝐨𝐥, 𝐝𝐫𝐮𝐠𝐬, 𝐝𝐞𝐚𝐭𝐡, 𝐬𝐰𝐞𝐚𝐫𝐢𝐧𝐠, 𝐩𝐚𝐧𝐢𝐜 𝐚𝐭𝐭𝐚𝐜𝐤𝐬.Complete
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𝘈𝘥𝘩𝘢𝘳𝘢 𝘗𝘰𝘵𝘵𝘦𝘳 𝘮𝘢𝘥𝘦 𝘢 𝘥𝘦𝘢𝘭 𝘵𝘰 𝘴𝘢𝘷𝘦 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘰𝘯𝘦𝘴 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘭𝘰𝘷𝘦𝘴... 𝘪𝘧 𝘰𝘯𝘭𝘺 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘤𝘰𝘶𝘭𝘥 𝘢𝘷𝘰𝘪𝘥 𝘴𝘢𝘪𝘥 𝘭𝘰𝘷𝘦𝘥 𝘰𝘯𝘦𝘴 𝘢𝘴 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘤𝘰𝘮𝘱𝘭𝘦𝘵𝘦𝘴 𝘪𝘵! !!𝐈 𝐝𝐨 𝐧𝐨𝐭 𝐨𝐰𝐧 𝐇𝐚𝐫𝐫𝐲 𝐏𝐨𝐭𝐭𝐞𝐫 𝐨𝐫 𝐚𝐧𝐲 𝐨𝐟 𝐭𝐡𝐞 𝐜𝐡𝐚𝐫𝐚𝐜𝐭𝐞𝐫𝐬!! (𝐓𝐡𝐢𝐬 𝐢𝐬 𝐅𝐚𝐧𝐟𝐢𝐜𝐭𝐢𝐨𝐧, 𝐭𝐡𝐢𝐧𝐠𝐬 𝐰𝐢𝐥𝐥 𝐛𝐞 𝐝𝐢𝐟𝐟𝐞𝐫𝐞𝐧𝐭. 𝐄𝐚𝐜𝐡 𝐬𝐭𝐨𝐫𝐲 𝐢𝐬 𝐬𝐞𝐭 𝐢𝐧 𝐚 𝐝𝐢𝐟𝐟𝐞𝐫𝐞𝐧𝐭 𝐮𝐧𝐢𝐯𝐞𝐫𝐬𝐞.) ♡ 𝘉𝘢𝘳𝘵𝘺 𝘊𝘳𝘰𝘶𝘤𝘩 𝘑𝘳 𝘟 𝘈𝘥𝘩𝘢𝘳𝘢 𝘗𝘰𝘵𝘵𝘦𝘳 ♡ *EDITING*Complete
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╭────── · · ୨≽^•⩊•^≼୧ · · ──────╮ ❝𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐚𝐥𝐥 𝐭𝐡𝐞 𝐤𝐢𝐝𝐬 𝐜𝐫𝐢𝐞𝐝 𝐨𝐮𝐭, "𝐩𝐥𝐞𝐚𝐬𝐞 𝐬𝐭𝐨𝐩, 𝐲𝐨𝐮'𝐫𝐞 𝐬𝐜𝐚𝐫𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐦𝐞 !" 𝐢 𝐜𝐚𝐧'𝐭 𝐡𝐞𝐥𝐩 𝐭𝐡𝐢𝐬 𝐚𝐰𝐟𝐮𝐥 𝐞𝐧𝐞𝐫𝐠𝐲 𝐠𝐨𝐝 𝐝𝐚𝐦𝐧 𝐫𝐢𝐠𝐡𝐭, 𝐲𝐨𝐮 𝐬𝐡𝐨𝐮𝐥𝐝 𝐛𝐞 𝐬𝐜𝐚𝐫𝐞𝐝 𝐨𝐟 𝐦𝐞 𝐰𝐡𝐨 𝐢𝐬 𝐢𝐧 𝐜𝐨𝐧𝐭𝐫𝐨𝐥? ❞ 「𝘤𝘰𝘯𝘵𝘳𝘰𝘭 × 𝘩𝘢𝘭𝘴𝘦𝘺 」 ✧˖°.--⋆˖⁺‧₊☽❀☾₊‧⁺˖⋆--✧˖°. ╰► ₊ ⊹ ᶻ𝘇 !! 𝗶𝗻 𝘄𝗵𝗶𝗰𝗵 𝗮 𝗴𝗶𝗿𝗹 𝗴𝗲𝘁𝘀 𝘁𝗼 𝗿𝗲𝘄𝗿𝗶𝘁𝗲 𝘁𝗵𝗲 𝘀𝗼-𝗰𝗮𝗹𝗹𝗲𝗱 𝗮𝗺𝗮𝘇𝗶𝗻𝗴 𝘄𝗼𝗿𝗹𝗱!! ␥ ✧˖°.--⋆˖⁺‧₊☽❀☾₊‧⁺˖⋆--✧˖°. ╰⪼𝐬𝐞𝐚𝐬𝐨𝐧 𝐭𝐡𝐫𝐞𝐞 - 𝐬𝐢𝐱 ✧˖°.--⋆˖⁺‧₊☽❀☾₊‧⁺˖⋆--✧˖°. plot and [Y/N] belongs to me. the amazing world of gumball does not belong to me. ✧˖°.--⋆˖⁺‧₊☽❀☾₊‧⁺˖⋆--✧˖°. 𝚜𝚝𝚊𝚛𝚝𝚎𝚍 ☆ 𝙾𝚌𝚝 ,, 𝟷𝟼 ,, 𝟸𝟶𝟸𝟸 𝚎𝚗𝚍𝚎𝚍 ☆ 𝙾𝚌𝚝 ,, 𝟹𝟷 ,, 𝟸𝟶𝟸𝟹 ✧˖°.--⋆˖⁺‧₊☽❀☾₊‧⁺˖⋆--✧˖°. ₍𝗍ɦα𐓣𝗄 𝗒ⱺυ 𝖿ⱺ𝗋 𝗌𝗍ⱺρρ𝗂𐓣𝗀 ᑲ𝗒 α𐓣ᑯ 𝗋𝖾αᑯ𝗂𐓣𝗀 !!₎ ╰────── · · ୨≽^•⩊•^≼୧ · · ──────╯Complete
ℓιℓу ρнσєвє ѕиαρє {ѕ. ѕєνєяυѕ}
"ᴘʀᴏғᴇssᴏʀ sɴᴀᴘᴇ ʜᴀs ᴀ ᴄʜɪʟᴅ?!" "ɪ ᴛʜᴏᴜɢʜᴛ ʜᴇ ᴡᴀs sɪɴɢʟᴇ?! ɪ ᴍᴇᴀɴ, ᴡʜᴏ ᴡᴏᴜʟᴅ ᴡᴀɴᴛ ᴛᴏ ᴍᴀʀʀʏ ᴛʜᴀ-" "ᴀʀᴇ ʏᴏᴜ ᴛᴀʟᴋɪɴɢ ʙᴀᴅ ᴀʙᴏᴜᴛ ᴍʏ ᴘᴀᴘᴀ?", ᴛʜᴇ ʟɪᴛᴛʟᴇ ɢɪʀʟ ᴀsᴋᴇᴅ, ᴍᴀᴋɪɴɢ ᴛʜᴇ ᴛʜʀᴇᴇ ғᴏᴜʀᴛʜ-ʏᴇᴀʀs ᴛᴇɴsᴇ. "ɴ-ɴᴏᴛ ᴀᴛ ᴀʟʟ! sᴀʏ, ᴡʜᴀᴛ's ʏᴏᴜʀ ɴᴀᴍᴇ ʟɪᴛᴛʟᴇ ᴏɴᴇ?", ᴛʜᴇ ʀᴇᴅ-ʜᴇᴀᴅ ᴀsᴋᴇᴅ. "ʟɪʟʏ ᴘʜᴏᴇʙᴇ sɴᴀᴘᴇ". //❁// ᴡᴀʀɴɪɴɢs: •ᴄᴜssɪɴɢ •ʟᴏᴡᴇʀᴄᴀsᴇ ɪɴᴛᴇɴᴅᴇᴅ •ᴍᴀʏ ɴᴏᴛ ғᴏʟʟᴏᴡ ᴘʟᴏᴛ //❁// 𝐬𝐭𝐚𝐫𝐭𝐞𝐝: 𝟗/𝟐𝟏/𝟐𝟎𝟐𝟎 𝐜𝐨𝐦𝐩𝐥𝐞𝐭𝐞𝐝: 𝟏𝟎/𝟕/𝟐𝟎𝟐𝟎Complete![31 ∂αуѕ σf нαρρу нαℓℓσωєєи [α тωѕт fαиfι¢]](https://img.wattpad.com/cover/323513221-256-k868533.jpg)
31 ∂αуѕ σf нαρρу нαℓℓσωєєи [α тωѕт fαиfι¢]
нαρρу нαℓℓσωєєи! тнє "ѕωєєт тяєαт" нαℓf σf нαℓℓσωєєи вєωαяє! ¢αи∂у, fιяєρℓα¢єѕ, нσт ¢нσ¢σℓαтє, ѕиυggℓєѕ, αи∂ кιѕѕєѕ ℓυяк ωιтнιи ;) тнє нαℓℓσωєєи ѕρє¢ιαℓ fσя 2022 fєαтυяιиg συя fανσυяιтє тωιѕтє∂ ωσи∂єяℓαи∂ вσуѕ! ρℓєαѕє вє ѕυяє тσ яєα∂ тнє ιитяσ∂υ¢тισи!! ι ∂σ иσт σωи тωιѕтє∂ ωσи∂єяℓαи∂, αℓℓ яιgнтѕ вєℓσиg тσ ∂ιѕиєу, αиιρℓєχ, αи∂ f4ѕαмυяαι (тнє σяιgιиαℓ ¢яєαтσяѕ). ι нσρє уσυ єиנσу! None of the pictures and videos used are mine, and they all belong to their original creators!Complete
𝐘/𝐧 𝐒𝐧𝐚𝐩𝐞. 𝐎𝐧𝐜𝐞 𝐫𝐢𝐝𝐢𝐜𝐮𝐥𝐞𝐝 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐥𝐨𝐚𝐭𝐡𝐞𝐝 𝐛𝐲 𝐡𝐞𝐫 𝐒𝐥𝐲𝐭𝐡𝐞𝐫𝐢𝐧 𝐩𝐞𝐞𝐫𝐬 𝐭𝐮𝐫𝐧𝐬 𝐢𝐧𝐭𝐨 𝐭𝐡𝐞 '𝐒𝐥𝐲𝐭𝐡𝐞𝐫𝐢𝐧 𝐏𝐫𝐢𝐧𝐜𝐞𝐬𝐬' 𝐚𝐟𝐭𝐞𝐫 𝐚 𝐬𝐮𝐦𝐦𝐞𝐫 𝐭𝐡𝐚𝐭 𝐛𝐥𝐞𝐬𝐬𝐞𝐝 𝐡𝐞𝐫 𝐝𝐞𝐚𝐫𝐥𝐲. 𝐅𝐫𝐢𝐞𝐧𝐝𝐬 𝐭𝐮𝐫𝐧 𝐭𝐨 𝐟𝐨𝐞, 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐮𝐧𝐞𝐱𝐩𝐞𝐜𝐭𝐞𝐝 𝐛𝐨𝐧𝐝𝐬 𝐟𝐨𝐫𝐦. 𝐓𝐡𝐞 𝐥𝐢𝐧𝐞 𝐨𝐟 𝐝𝐚𝐫𝐤 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐥𝐢𝐠𝐡𝐭 𝐢𝐬 𝐭𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐝𝐞𝐝 𝐰𝐢𝐭𝐡 𝐥𝐢𝐭𝐭𝐥𝐞 𝐜𝐚𝐮𝐭𝐢𝐨𝐧. ᠃ ⚘᠂ ⚘ ˚ ⚘ ᠂ ⚘ ᠃ ᴀʟʟ ᴄʜᴀᴘᴛᴇʀꜱ ᴀʀᴇ (roughly) 2000-3500 ᴡᴏʀᴅꜱ <3 ᴛʜɪꜱ ʙᴏᴏᴋ ɪꜱ ᴀ ᴡᴏʀᴋ ɪɴ ᴘʀᴏɢʀᴇꜱꜱ!! ᠃ ⚘᠂ ⚘ ˚ ⚘ ᠂ ⚘ ᠃ Started: 01/11/2023 Completed: ~~/~~/~~~~ ᠃ ⚘᠂ ⚘ ˚ ⚘ ᠂ ⚘ ᠃ I do not own any of these characters a part from Y/n! Credits go to JK Rowling and yasmineamaro for the characters used in this fan fiction! The storyline is original by me <3 ᠃ ⚘᠂ ⚘ ˚ ⚘ ᠂ ⚘ ᠃ ©n1ghtmar3XD 2023
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