Criticism for you
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Last published Sun, Oct 9, 2016
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𝐣𝐨𝐡𝐧𝐧𝐲 𝐜𝐚𝐝𝐞 𝐱 𝐟𝐞𝐦! 𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐝𝐞𝐫 * 𝒐𝒉, (𝒚/𝒏)? 𝒔𝒉𝒐𝒐𝒕, 𝒔𝒉𝒆'𝒔 𝒕𝒐𝒖𝒈𝒉𝒆𝒓 𝒕𝒉𝒂𝒏 𝒂 𝒃𝒂𝒈 𝒐𝒇 𝒏𝒂𝒊𝒍𝒔, 𝒂𝒏𝒅 𝒕𝒘𝒊𝒄𝒆 𝒂𝒔 𝒎𝒆𝒂𝒏, 𝒕𝒐𝒐. 𝒃𝒖𝒕 𝒔𝒉𝒆'𝒔 𝒂 𝒓𝒆𝒂𝒍 𝒅𝒐𝒍𝒍 𝒐𝒏𝒄𝒆 𝒚𝒐𝒖 𝒈𝒆𝒕 𝒕𝒐 𝒌𝒏𝒐𝒘 𝒉𝒆𝒓. ...𝒊𝒇 𝒚𝒐𝒖 𝒔𝒖𝒓𝒗𝒊𝒗𝒆 𝒍𝒐𝒏𝒈 𝒆𝒏𝒐𝒖𝒈𝒉. * 𝐜𝐨𝐧𝐭𝐚𝐢𝐧𝐬 𝐠𝐨𝐫𝐞, 𝐟𝐢𝐠𝐡𝐭𝐬, 𝐦𝐮𝐫𝐝𝐞𝐫, 𝐛𝐥𝐨 𝐨𝐝, 𝐢𝐧𝐣𝐮𝐫𝐲, 𝐢𝐧𝐧𝐮𝐞𝐧𝐝𝐨𝐬, 𝐦𝐞𝐧𝐭𝐢𝐨𝐧𝐬 𝐨𝐟 𝐬𝐞𝐱, 𝐥𝐢𝐦𝐞𝐬, 𝐣𝐨𝐡𝐧𝐧𝐲 𝐝𝐨𝐞𝐬 𝐧𝐨𝐭 𝐝𝐢𝐞, 𝐢 𝐤𝐧𝐨𝐰 𝐢𝐭 𝐥𝐨𝐨𝐤𝐬 𝐬𝐡𝐨𝐫𝐭 𝐛𝐮𝐭 𝐭𝐡𝐞 𝐜𝐡𝐚𝐩𝐭𝐞𝐫𝐬 𝐚𝐫𝐞 𝐥𝐨𝐧𝐠, 𝐞𝐭𝐜.Complete
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╭────── · · ୨≽^•⩊•^≼୧ · · ──────╮ ❝𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐚𝐥𝐥 𝐭𝐡𝐞 𝐤𝐢𝐝𝐬 𝐜𝐫𝐢𝐞𝐝 𝐨𝐮𝐭, "𝐩𝐥𝐞𝐚𝐬𝐞 𝐬𝐭𝐨𝐩, 𝐲𝐨𝐮'𝐫𝐞 𝐬𝐜𝐚𝐫𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐦𝐞 !" 𝐢 𝐜𝐚𝐧'𝐭 𝐡𝐞𝐥𝐩 𝐭𝐡𝐢𝐬 𝐚𝐰𝐟𝐮𝐥 𝐞𝐧𝐞𝐫𝐠𝐲 𝐠𝐨𝐝 𝐝𝐚𝐦𝐧 𝐫𝐢𝐠𝐡𝐭, 𝐲𝐨𝐮 𝐬𝐡𝐨𝐮𝐥𝐝 𝐛𝐞 𝐬𝐜𝐚𝐫𝐞𝐝 𝐨𝐟 𝐦𝐞 𝐰𝐡𝐨 𝐢𝐬 𝐢𝐧 𝐜𝐨𝐧𝐭𝐫𝐨𝐥? ❞ 「𝘤𝘰𝘯𝘵𝘳𝘰𝘭 × 𝘩𝘢𝘭𝘴𝘦𝘺 」 ✧˖°.--⋆˖⁺‧₊☽❀☾₊‧⁺˖⋆--✧˖°. ╰► ₊ ⊹ ᶻ𝘇 !! 𝗶𝗻 𝘄𝗵𝗶𝗰𝗵 𝗮 𝗴𝗶𝗿𝗹 𝗴𝗲𝘁𝘀 𝘁𝗼 𝗿𝗲𝘄𝗿𝗶𝘁𝗲 𝘁𝗵𝗲 𝘀𝗼-𝗰𝗮𝗹𝗹𝗲𝗱 𝗮𝗺𝗮𝘇𝗶𝗻𝗴 𝘄𝗼𝗿𝗹𝗱!! ␥ ✧˖°.--⋆˖⁺‧₊☽❀☾₊‧⁺˖⋆--✧˖°. ╰⪼𝐬𝐞𝐚𝐬𝐨𝐧 𝐭𝐡𝐫𝐞𝐞 - 𝐬𝐢𝐱 ✧˖°.--⋆˖⁺‧₊☽❀☾₊‧⁺˖⋆--✧˖°. plot and [Y/N] belongs to me. the amazing world of gumball does not belong to me. ✧˖°.--⋆˖⁺‧₊☽❀☾₊‧⁺˖⋆--✧˖°. 𝚜𝚝𝚊𝚛𝚝𝚎𝚍 ☆ 𝙾𝚌𝚝 ,, 𝟷𝟼 ,, 𝟸𝟶𝟸𝟸 𝚎𝚗𝚍𝚎𝚍 ☆ 𝙾𝚌𝚝 ,, 𝟹𝟷 ,, 𝟸𝟶𝟸𝟹 ✧˖°.--⋆˖⁺‧₊☽❀☾₊‧⁺˖⋆--✧˖°. ₍𝗍ɦα𐓣𝗄 𝗒ⱺυ 𝖿ⱺ𝗋 𝗌𝗍ⱺρρ𝗂𐓣𝗀 ᑲ𝗒 α𐓣ᑯ 𝗋𝖾αᑯ𝗂𐓣𝗀 !!₎ ╰────── · · ୨≽^•⩊•^≼୧ · · ──────╯Complete
"ᴵ'ᵐ ⁿᵒᵗ ᵗʰᵉ ᵍᵒᵒᵈ ᵍᵘʸ ˢⁱᵉⁿⁿᵃ, ʳᵉᵐᵉᵐᵇᵉʳ ᵗʰᵃᵗ. ᴵ ᵈᵒ ʷʰᵃᵗ ᴵ ʷᵃⁿᵗ, ᴵ ᵗᵃᵏᵉ ʷʰᵃᵗ ᴵ ʷᵃⁿᵗ. ᴬⁿᵈ ᴵ ʷᵃⁿᵗ ʸᵒᵘ." 𝘚𝘪𝘦𝘯𝘯𝘢 𝘸𝘢𝘴 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘭𝘢𝘴𝘵 𝘰𝘯𝘦 𝘴𝘵𝘢𝘯𝘥𝘪𝘯𝘨. 𝘏𝘦 𝘵𝘰𝘰𝘬 𝘦𝘷𝘦𝘳𝘺𝘵𝘩𝘪𝘯𝘨 𝘢𝘸𝘢𝘺 𝘧𝘳𝘰𝘮 𝘩𝘦𝘳, 𝘦𝘷𝘦𝘳𝘺 𝘴𝘪𝘯𝘨𝘭𝘦 𝘱𝘦𝘳𝘴𝘰𝘯 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘩𝘢𝘴 𝘦𝘷𝘦𝘳 𝘭𝘰𝘷𝘦𝘥. 𝘌𝘷𝘦𝘳 𝘴𝘪𝘯𝘤𝘦 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘭𝘢𝘴𝘵 𝘰𝘯𝘦 𝘥𝘪𝘦𝘥 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘴𝘸𝘰𝘳𝘦 𝘵𝘩𝘢𝘵 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘸𝘰𝘶𝘭𝘥 𝘦𝘯𝘥 𝘩𝘪𝘮. 𝘐𝘵 𝘸𝘢𝘴𝘯'𝘵 𝘢𝘴 𝘦𝘢𝘴𝘺 𝘢𝘴 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘩𝘰𝘱𝘦𝘥, 𝘦𝘴𝘱𝘦𝘤𝘪𝘢𝘭𝘭𝘺 𝘯𝘰𝘵 𝘸𝘩𝘦𝘯 𝘩𝘪𝘴 𝘴𝘰𝘯 𝘤𝘢𝘮𝘦 𝘪𝘯𝘵𝘰 𝘩𝘦𝘳 𝘭𝘪𝘧𝘦. 𝘉𝘶𝘵 𝘴𝘩𝘦 𝘯𝘦𝘷𝘦𝘳 𝘸𝘰𝘶𝘭𝘥'𝘷𝘦 𝘵𝘩𝘰𝘶𝘨𝘩𝘵 𝘵𝘩𝘢𝘵 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘴𝘰𝘯 𝘰𝘧 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘥𝘦𝘷𝘪𝘭 𝘩𝘢𝘥 𝘩𝘪𝘴 𝘰𝘸𝘯 𝘱𝘭𝘢𝘯... ᴍᴀᴛᴛʜᴇᴏ ʀɪᴅᴅʟᴇ x ꜰᴇᴍ ᴏᴄ 𝐓𝐖: 𝐒𝐞𝐱𝐮𝐚𝐥 𝐚𝐛𝐮𝐬𝐞/𝐚𝐬𝐬𝐮𝐚𝐥𝐭, 𝐚𝐥𝐜𝐨𝐡𝐨𝐥, 𝐝𝐫𝐮𝐠𝐬, 𝐝𝐞𝐚𝐭𝐡, 𝐬𝐰𝐞𝐚𝐫𝐢𝐧𝐠, 𝐩𝐚𝐧𝐢𝐜 𝐚𝐭𝐭𝐚𝐜𝐤𝐬.
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