Untitled (for now)

So... Basically it's about two girls who's parents were enemies and ended up killing each other in battle. It takes place in a magical world that I made up. (by the way, there may be some pretty violent parts so beware!!)
This is also one of the first stories I've probably shown anyone, with a few exceptions of course, so please, try not to be too rude if you want to judge it's quality.