A poorly-written story

A small awfully-written short story from an English class that I touched up a bit. You may not want to read this if you are looking for worthwhile content; and if I may, suggest that you read some of my friends stories, which are full of meaningful content. I suggest goingonanadventure02 for some beautiful written stories, or if you like anime and a dash of romantic literature, than try VaughanGirl's wonderfully written fanfictions.