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Iris a descendant of one of the survivors of a nuclear war that shook the entire world 200 years ago. She wants to escape the confines of her home and explore the land below when a mysterious man shows up at her doorstep to help her escape and fulfill her desires.
Where will this lead the two of them?
This is a short story that I wrote for my creative writing class. I'm just posting it on here because I want some feedback to better my writing in the future.
So just give me some polite tips/pointers (no cursing or insults please and thank you) on what I need to fix/sounds off and I'll be a happy camper.
Thanks!
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