Why why WHY!!!!! (a sebatian fanfic)

raven is just a normal girl well that is until her parents where murdered right in front of her eyes whilst she stood there unable to move her and her 2 year old brother were kidnapped and mad slaves 2 years later she couldn't take it any longer her brother only 4 years old had just been tortured to death and now she was out for revenge however she needed some help " hello" " you sumond me"

hello dear reader this is my first ever sebatian fan fiction criticism is accepted as I probably need to improve hopefully you will like it thanks for reading