Foreign12

This is the beginning of a book: I don't really like it how can I fix it help
          	
          	
          	Yasmine wakes up groggily lifting up her hand from her computer mouse and wiping her saliva, as she says " I must have over slept".. 
          	YASMINE! Her mom yells from down stairs .  COMING ! she yells back
          	
          	Yasmine walks  downstairs and as she does her mom asked her"Do you realize you overslept?If you don't hurry your going to be late !" I know mom but late nights always make me groggy the next morning .
          	
          	Yeah whatever . Go get dress Yasmine .. 
          	I was trying to but you interrupted me . But anyways , make me breakfast please?! 
          	Or what do ya think about it 
          	
          	
          	
          	

Foreign12

Your welcome and it's awesome 
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Foreign12

This is the beginning of a book: I don't really like it how can I fix it help
          
          
          Yasmine wakes up groggily lifting up her hand from her computer mouse and wiping her saliva, as she says " I must have over slept".. 
          YASMINE! Her mom yells from down stairs .  COMING ! she yells back
          
          Yasmine walks  downstairs and as she does her mom asked her"Do you realize you overslept?If you don't hurry your going to be late !" I know mom but late nights always make me groggy the next morning .
          
          Yeah whatever . Go get dress Yasmine .. 
          I was trying to but you interrupted me . But anyways , make me breakfast please?! 
          Or what do ya think about it 
          
          
          
          

Foreign12

Your welcome and it's awesome 
Yanıtla