story ideas and feedback abt said ideas

idea of story from dream A

ok so basically from what i remember the dream was about how there was some kind of evil going around they call it 聞こえない (kikoenai) which according to google it means inaudible since whenever someone said it in any other language other than Japanese it was muffled fsr. anyways, no one knew what it looked like or what it was capable of but fsr it had one weakness which is someone who could understand it like some kind of emo or somthin. anywho, at the same time there was a new kid in town. whats his name? i dont fucking know since hoooooooooo boy he isnt identified with one so for now we'll call him Judas cuz thats a real name and the other names that where on the list that would work with how he looked didnt fit cuz im weird. ok so Judas isnt a "normal" kid he usually walks but unless the weather is lovely (in-between hot as fuck and freezing my nips of and not pouring rain so like spring even tho its late September) his parents drop him off usually its his mom since shes a house wife i guess. they drive a Cadillac hearse which is some kind of station wagon but this one is newer i guess and black ofc. (google terse hearse) anyway, so he usually opens the back seat door and jumps out of a maroon velvet interior which has a small window in the middle for the driver to see through and the windows are tinted on the outside of the car. so as he gets out she says bye an shit and hes wearing a gray long sleeve shirt with a black slipknot tee with the iowa album on it layered on top of it with black ripped skinny jeans and black converse with a chunky knit beanie. he has Kurt cobains hair cut but slightly shorter and black with pail skin like you can see his  veins pail and he has hazel gray eyes. so like the embodiment of edge lord. any who so basically cuz i think this explanation is confusing im gonna put in story format then switch between explanation and story by using {}. when in the lines its a story element{ he walked into the school and out to the school yard where everyone meets every morning people where staring as he went by since usually when there was a new kid they would try to find someone and stick with them till they branch out on their own and no one new who someone who looks like a member of the Adams family would choose to stick with. as he entered the yard i saw him from a far he was a speck of white against the sea of color and was easy to point out. sure he wasnt the only one that wore all black but he was the only one with a burgundy back pack with black stripes on  it it made me think of dr peper. man im thirsty. he looked around then took a couple of steps before almost everyone turned to look at him. they always do this when someone new was around, it was a small town after all so any thing slightly new was alien life to us. i looked back down at my book but still watched from the corners of my eyes. as he walked everyone made a sort of path when he walked and the path shuffled my way then i saw two feet in front of me. i look up and its him we lock eyes for a second as he reads my mannerisms and then i hear the sound of walking. i look away to see Jodi and his little posy 'ugh these dickheads' i thought to myself Jodi was one of the annoying athletic kids who always made PE hell for anyone who was just trying to get through the day. he was a short blonde white boy who was wearing a white hoodie blue basketball shorts bright red socks and pink converse. his posy today consisted of Markus, Jacob, Damien, and James. Markus was your typical fuck boy him and Jacob where the only black kids in our grade} this is based on some real people i went to school with{ Jacob was the one kid in science that was a popular kid that i could stand Damien was a sporty kid and would get in trouble but i could get along with him and i could tell at heart he was a good kid and James was a little cunt who really had no personality on his own but was the kind of kid that would moan during class when with his little friends. "hey im Jodi was good" said Jodi with that little head nod thing as to say sup he held his hand out for the new kid to shake which he did reluctantly "Judas" he said in a quiet monotone manner "Judas? who names their kid Judas with a chance of them becoming an emo?" said Markus before the group of asses laughed a little "nah im just playin bro you good." he continued. "so what chu doing just staring at this thing" said Jodi pointing at me "wanna hang with us?" asked Jodi obviously trying to see if the kid was considered cool in his book. "eh no thanks id rather make out with an angry wasp nest" replied Judas before he turned to ask me where the bathroom and i simply pointed towards the building and he said thanks before walking away} ok so thats kind of a basic example of it. tell me what you think i actually enjoyed writing that even though its a lot of run on sentences and shit but at least i tried since its almost 12 30 here. anywho tell me what yall think