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Review 23 : Anidita - The Rhythm of Love

Book's name : Anidita - The Rhythm of Love
Author : iam_anks03

Firstly thank you for choosing my review shop for reviewing your book and a small sorry for being late. I have tried to mention all the pros and cons about your book in detail so without delaying lets start.

Cover & Blurb : Firstly talking about the cover, I found it pretty enough with necessary things. Nothing much to say about it. Coming to the blurb, its attractive enough for the readers to sneak inside your book.

Plots : Your book is amazingly written. The each plot you involved in your book is very appreciated. "She is not insane" that part was a very important part of the book also a very social awareness creating one. Anxiety disorder does not imply that the person is lunatic. So this part is very much appreciated!

Friendship is a base you strongly focused on. The way you showed Batuk's love for his boudi was very heart touching. Even when Anirudh forwarded his hand for friendship towards Bondita for starting a new life was a noteworthy one. Family's bond was well shown.

About the gender harassment in college. I loved that part.

Talking about the cons, there are ample to be found. Firstly is rushing of scenes. Your plots are beautiful no doubt but you rush a little to much with the things. Sometimes there a little more curiosity working within the readers that 'what would have happened if she had asked this?'. The conversation feels incomplete sometimes along with easy acceptations.

Anirudh is a bit different in your story. He is not like the regular Anirudh we know. He is impulsive , unintentionally romantic and fool in love. What irritated me was his doubt about Batuk and Bondita's relationship. It made me felt him being a typical husband type. Also, 'pinning her to wall', I don't know but that sounds cringe. Who gave you the right to pin someone to the wall just because you are angry on them. Well, I term this part as his impulsiveness.

These were a little grey shaded part of his character. Rest, he is sweet man asking his wife to sing with him infront of all and chanting love in disguise of zimmedari.

Writing style and language : Coming to writing style, there is so many things to say. Presentation is one of the important factor for the readers to be attracted towards a book. If you ask me I will say the presentation part in your book needs a lot of grooming.

Use of long paras actually pained my eyes to maintain the continuity. In a single long para you wrote too many dialogues in one go which actually seemed very poor to me.

Secondly, Dialogues were great but the emotional attachment was not there. Being a writer myself, I strongly try to focus on this particular factor. Trust me without dialogues but only with the story telling and expressing the character's emotions you can make your readers feel what you want them to. So trying to grip hard there.

Thirdly about language, its an over joy of ride to read an hinglish fanfiction but what caused the problems was the spelling errors. It disrupts the flow of readers. Sometimes it was hard for me to catch what you really wanted to portray.

Suppose "pehnti" it should be written as "pehenti" it eases the reading for the non Indian readers like me. Again we can have the correct pronunciation.While reading your book I already marked many things that where there were minor mistakes , be it the grammar or the typos.

Metaphor : As I already mentioned, you rush with your scenes a little to much. Not everything in your circumambient is necessary to explain but at least a bit should be characterized by the writer. But in your book everything is left upto reader's imagination i.e identical things.

For instance, when I was reading the book I actually forgot that Anirudh was still practising wearing his black and white dress up. This was a small instance. There are many things like that.

Another thing which downed the quality of your book was "they suddenly became hesitated and jerked away" I mean why? I read this for nth time. The same line.

I am just going on with the reading hoping to understand their inner conflicts but no. In one line they stare each other and the next line they separates away. Things aren't that plain. I was not satisfied with that part and felt too much lacking in emotional attachment.

Vocabulary : Well for me literature is the heaven of words. A good book without good vocabulary cannot grip a reader's mind. I admit the normal school going students is ofcourse pressuring we writers for using easy words, but remember if you want to pursue your passion as profession futher ahead in life you cannot make up your place like this. So I will really recommend you enriching your vocabulary. Since you have amazing plots a little effort on this sector will overshadow the other loops and bring you book to the finest.

Constructive criticism is better than fake flattery. Just obliged to it. Wish you all the best for bright future ahead!

Reviewed by
Shoptorshi

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