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A Witch's Vow (Emmanuel)

Author: EnigmaEpic

Genre: Paranormal

Reviewer: Denyefa4

A Witch's Vow is a paranormal book about a hybrid on a quest for revenge but due to a promise she made to her father, she had to halt her march for vengeance. So now she works as a part-time henchwoman, but when she's tasked to find a princess, she might as well be taking her revenge.

I love that your main characters meet in your second chapter, when writing paranormal, your main leads must meet in the early part of the chapter to help excite your readers. I also love the little cliffhangers you add to the end of your chapters, it helps in retaining readers and encouraging your readers to keep reading.

So let's begin with your cover, well your cover is nice but a little too normal, if you know what I mean. When creating a cover for a paranormal you need to give off that scary and mysterious vibe that comes with the genre, and secondly, your font wasn't really visible as I need to concentrate to be able to get your title. I couldn't squint my eyes to read the text at the top of the cover so I have no idea what was written there.

Your prologue, your prologue did a great job of setting the pace of what we were to expect, and it left some questions unanswered which is great. It's good to always keep your readers guessing. At the moment I'm compelled to know what the mother had to do, and the effect of what she did. The only problem I have with this is the jumping from scene to scene, it confuses your audience without giving them enough to bite on. For example when you skip from the next to the throne room, then to the person eavesdropping.

In your first chapter, as writers we're all growing and tend to fall victim to this is our writing as it's part of our growth and even experienced writers are still learning the technique. It's the show don't tell technique. It's a very difficult thing to understand and takes time to master. In your writing, you tell instead of show. By telling I mean you just state out what a person is doing, instead of explaining how the person does it so that your readers can paint a mental picture of whatever is going on. Also, I noticed that you paint your characters in the same light, when writing it's advisable to distinguish your character's personality so as not to confuse your readers. If a character has a distinct personality, even without pointing out that this was done by this character, your readers already know. In this chapter your info is dumped, all writers are victims of this at the early stages of their careers. What my mentor always advises I do is, instead of just writing a bunch of important information down, fix it into dialogue, so instead of just saying that her clients tell her about the disappearances, creates scenes to show us where the clients told her about the event.

In your second chapter, you did a good job here with the suspense and not giving off too much detail and the cliffhanger at the end of this chapter is persuading me to read more, good job.

Grammar, your grammar is good and I couldn't find any typos. Good job.

In conclusion, this book has potential for greatness but there is still lots of work that needs to be done by the writer to unearth the beauty in this piece.

I rate the book a 2 out of 5 as the writer still has lots of work to do but is on the right part. If you're a paranormal lover then I'm positive you'll enjoy this.