Reason for not finishing: I'm allergic to cringe and the blatant misogyny toward women
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1) Good Start
The start was actually really good, except for the edginess of the MC. I enjoyed the dynamic between Y/n and a lot of killers/survivors.
2) The Yikes
Now, I want you to keep one word in mind when you read this next part, "Insecure". Every woman that Y/n so much as brushes uo againt prsctically falls for him within a chapter or two, for example, I got to chapter 38, just about the half way mark. By this time, there were 6 women that were heavily hinted at having a crush on Y/n. There were 2 that actually make sense, Claire and Cheryl. However the other four make no goddamn sense considering that for the most part every woman in this story HAS GOT to be saved by Y/n SOMEHOW. Idk if author has a hero complex or something but it's pathetic.
3) Bloated Character List
There are only about 5-10 survivors that Y/n consistenly interacts with, some of which were completely forgotten *Cough Cough* Quentin *Cough Cough* and yet, this mf still decides to add in OCs. Fucking baffling. And its not like these OCs were important to the story, it was fucking Until Dawn. With the introduction fo the UD characters and chapter 38 (when I stopped reading) they were mentioned at most 7 times. This is what anybody with a speck of ecperience as an Author calls Bloat. Bloat is when something that adds nothing is brought in, only to muddy up the story and cause readers to wonder wtf this even means. And then this motherfucker adds in fucking Sans Undertale furry Yiff wolf thing AND ITS FROM ANOTHER ONE OF HIS STORIES. There is no point to add in characters to fit archetypes or for lore purposes when you have like 20 conpletely unused survivors. And its not like author is adverse to changing their personalities, so whats the goddamn point? The answer is degeneracy my friend.
4) Degenerate by Daylight
The funniest thing to me is seeing just how F'd up someone's world views are by reading their literature. So far we have Misogyny, and a Hero Complex.
Noe what if I told you that the ONLY lemon in the entire book is between an original DbD character, and one of the Author's OCs. Yeah. Now, friends, it doesn't take Sherlock to tell you guys that maybe, just maybe, the Author is perhaps horny for Yui?? First off, lemons are gross no matter the context, but this one is worse, Yui clearly hates it at the start but just kinda melts into it??? (Remember how I mentioned that all womrn must flock to Y/n? That's just the author projecting.) Like its very clear that Yui and Eric(fuck that cringe name) are enemies, but then Eric kinda just forces himself onto Yui, then she just magically likes it?????? Its fucked on so many levels, I csnt even begin to wrap my head around this.
5) Fucking Stop
Can you please stop writing all the women in your stories as weak and making it so the only possible savior to them is Y/n and your self inserts?? PLEASE.
There was a part, right before I stopped reading, and its the main reason I stopped. So Cheryl, who really trusted a killer, gets completely betrayed by said killer, in a rrally fucked up way, and she is bawling her eyes out after this, like genuine sobbing for hours on end, refusing to communicate with people. And the only time she gets better is when Mr. White Knight himself, Y/n, comes and gives her a hug, then she's just magically cured. No more crying.
Its so fucked up.
It doesnt take any effort to make a good relationship in a book, just ask "What does Character A like about Character B, and how does that bring them closer together?"
The only thing Cheryl likes about Y/n is that he's a "Nice Guy TM" and that he's protective.
Genuinly what the fuck?? Like why do you always write the women as basically NPCs??
Tbf all of thesr characters are 1 dimensional skit characters eith one personality trait and thats all, but the bois are slightly less that way.
Cheryl: Cries (must have her Y/n nightlight to keep good character writing st bay)
Claire: Fuckin' nothing (Thr most bland character ever. Is constantly reffered to as a 'tomboy' but never displays any of those traits other than a bit of an attitude towards killers. ((Wow a woman fighting for her life?? Such a Tomboy)) (((This motherfucker thinks women are so helpless that any form of self defence is considered to be a "male archetype" hence the tonboy name)))
Laurie: Tough outer shell but breaks down only for Y/n to comfort her, kisses him 5 minutes later (Bro this is not how real people work, please go outaide and have a conversation eith someone)
Jill: she wears a police uniform, so obviously her entire personality is being a detective. Her detective work focuses solely on Y/n
Rin: Innocent schoolgirl that falls for Y/n after hearing him sing 1 time
Amanda: angy >:(
Kate: hapy :)
Nea: bitch (not done in a good way)
And now for the Bois
Steve: Funny but serious at times.
Leon: Efficient and fun
Danny: Comedic but shows hints of sympathy (Only to Y/n though, couldn't possibly have him being a dynamic charcter)
Nemesis: Somehow the one whi can only say one thing is the deepest, I guess Author cant fuck up dialogue if there isnt dialogue to fuck up??
David: meathead (there is an entire tome abt David's self struggle and this mf just takes onr look at david's character portrait and just turns him into a fuckin meathead. Worst part is that he writes David's dialogur eith built in british and its so goddamn cringe)
Ji Woon: Korea
Jake: Meanie antag that has completely valid reasons but is still treated like an antag bc of Author's hero complex.
Frank: loud mouthed teen (not at all likr his base lore and tome lore which both show how deceptive, manipulative, and cunning he is. But nah nah nah, why put in effort when I can just make him a brat????)
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A/n: So the motherfucker deleted half the chapters in his book and DELETED THE YUI RAPE CHAPTER. FUCK YEAH!!! LETS FUCKING GO! HUMAN DECENCY FOR THE WIN!!!!
