𝗠𝗬𝗦𝗧𝗘𝗥𝗜𝗔: 𝗋𝖾𝗏𝗂𝖾𝗐 𝖼𝖺𝗌𝗍𝗅𝖾 . ☄ .

───ㅤlife within the halls

REVIEWER: CinnasLilRebel
CUSTOMER: reindolfwrites

⟨ 🪄 ⟩ ── Cover [6/10]

The cover is a little hard to read since the title doesn’t sit well on the building, and the subtitle isn’t easy to read either. I don’t believe the elements are related to the story I’d like to recommend a Graphic Designer. There are plenty of them on Wattpad, and even Alora has a Graphic shop.

⟨ 🪄 ⟩ ── Title [4/5]

The title seems to fit the book well, it does equilibrate with the reality students practically live in school, with the amount of time and work they must put into, for potentially an education that’ll mean nothing later.

⟨ 🪄 ⟩ ── Blurb [2.5/5]

The blurb has a few punctual errors, that can be able to be fixed with Grammarly. The blurb does seem to set the mood of a mystery-thriller which seems to be the role, you’re aiming for.

⟨ 🪄 ⟩ ── Inception [8/10]

The beginning was fantastic, though there were some issues I noticed that could be solved by some editing and Grammarly or an editor from an editing shop. The beginning chapter was a wonderful start gave a good background and seems to sum the school up, quite well.

⟨ 🪄 ⟩ ── Plot, Idea and Execution [15/25]

The plot is well thought out and the idea is magnificent, I think the execution would be better if it was more detailed in certain areas. I think the flow seems to go a little quick during the story, chapter three is a new day. I think maybe consider trying to fill in the pieces for the main characters' lives after school and share their private reactions to the murder of the cheerleader.

⟨ 🪄 ⟩ ── Characters and Emotions [14/15]

The characters all are facing plenty of different emotions, though I believe the story would be great in 3rd person, but the alternating POV is doing decently well for a mystery thriller.

⟨ 🪄 ⟩ ── Writing Style and Tone [7.5/10]

Your tone comes off serious, but I think that the mysterious part could come off better with some more description. I would try to ease up on the tone tags, a friend of mine who’s a published author said it’s better to try not to use them since the readers might picture the dialogue one way, but you decided it was something else.

⟨ 🪄 ⟩ ── Grammar Point [12/20]

You’re writing well, but there are some minor errors in grammar as well as punctuation. I’m aware you’re planning to edit from the information given in your blurb, I’d check out Grammarly or an editing shop on Wattpad.

/ 🔮 / TOTAL ── [69/100]

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