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Chapter 2 & 3

Chapter 2

We were hiding behind a big bush, then we saw this thing…this thing hovering over a girl…eating her! The thing looked exactly like Kristen, and she was wearing the exact same clothes. Everything was exactly the same, except she had like a red face or something. After a second of looking at her you could tell the red stuff on her face blood. Kristen, or whatever that thing was, had fangs. In all the movies vampires all had super white teeth that were squeaky clean, but its fangs were covered in blood, and there was blood dripping off of the points. She had very pointy, devil-like ears, a tail, and teeth in her hands. Like, two mouths in her hands! What the fuck?! When I said she was an angel…boy was I wrong! She’s like a Child of Satan or some shit. You could hear the girl screaming as loud as humanly possible while that Child of Satan was gnawing away at her flesh.

“Didn’t I tell you to shut the hell up?” Kristen said looking at the unknown girl. She didn’t sound anything like she did. She sounded more like a devil then she did a fifteen year old girl. “This’ll be harder for you if you keep screaming like that…”

Then Miguel sneezed. What a dumb ass! I thought I told him to be quiet.

Kristen’s head flew up in our direction, then she growled. Miguel and I start running to I don’t even know where.

Finally we’re on some roads headed to my house, which when you’re running for your life seems like 2344 miles away, when it’s actually only 20 blocks.

When we got to my house all you could hear was us panting. When Miguel was able to talk he said “Was that,” he panted, “what I think I saw?”

“well it depends…on what…you think…you saw,” I said in between pants.

“I think dat was Kristen…ya know.. the girl y-“ I didn’t let him finish.

“Yeah yeah. I know. The girl I like.”

“yeah, her. You think that’s who it was?”

“I’m not really sure,” I said, “She…or it, looked like her, and she was wearing the same clothes. Everything was the same…except the fact that everything was covered in blood…”

“I know! Ew I know. I can see it in my head good enough without your help!” Miguel said.

“Maybe we should go back. N really check her face out. Except be quiet…n not sneeze!”

“Sorry! It was a accident!”

“Whatever,” I say, “But anyways, we should go back, check it out, and if it’s her, then I’ll talk to her to-“

He looked at me crazy, “NO THE HELL YOU WONT BE TALKING TO HER ABOUT THAT SHIT TOMORROW! ARE YOU FUCKIN’ CRAZY?!?! SHE COULD BITE YOUR FUCKIN’ HEAD OFF! DIDN’T YOU SEE WHAT THE HELL THAT BITCH DID TO THAT CHICK?! God, you can be SUCH a dumb ass sometimes,” he started to calm down.

“Fine. I won’t talk to her,” I say frowning.

“Good boy,” he says winking.

“But don’t you think she might explain?”

“Explain by biting our heads off? Um, I’ll pass on that. But w-we should g-go check it o-out…” he says stuttering a bit.

“What’re you scared of? It? Or what it might do if it sees us?”

“Both! Dude we could fuckin’ die if she sees us!”

I laugh kind of evilly, “That’s why we hide…” I say walking towards the woods again.

“God. We are some stupid ass motha’ fucka’s.”

At that, we ran back to the woods.

“That’s a lot of runnin’!” he says