Excercise 1 Pt A - Hills Like White Elephants Exercise

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Write a scene between 500-1000 words. You can't use dialogue tags (he said, she replied) you can't use action, no description, no internal dialogue. And the characters can't at any time in the scene, just come out and tell us what is happening.

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"You did a terrible mistake, John."

"Me? how come?"

"Yes, you. You just gave away some of your share to that crazy chick Linda for what, a kiss on your cheek?"

"She's hot, man! Anyone here would do just the same to get her sweet smile."

"I wouldn't!"

"You're too stiff, man! Too traditional. You should try to do what I do once in a while. You know, enjoying your life a bit."

"Like hell I would! This traditional man is the one who keeps this company moving for the last five years."

"Ah, come on. This company won't go bankrupt just because it's lost a little of its share."

"You crazy brat! You won't last a month if you keep doing that."

"Ok, OK. I get it. Will try to follow your traditional rules."

"This better be a lesson for you too, Cyntia. As a member of board directors, you should know that every move and action you take will affect the attitude of other members of board directors. Don't let the last drunk accident happen again in the meeting room, Ok?"

"Ok, Jim. I told you I was sorry. I have no intention of doing that ever again."

"I think that incident was kind of cool. Not every day you see a member of board directors dance on a table in the middle of a meeting."

"Oh, for god shake! You never take anything seriously, don't you? Maybe I should kick your ass now."

"Jim, please don't do it! John doesn't mean it that way, right John?"

"Ya, right. All I said was you should take it easy sometimes, Jim. You're being too hard on yourself, and us too. You make it as if if we do things a little out of the book the company will collapse, if we relax a little our competitors will eat us up."

"That's the truth, young man!"

"No, it's not! Look at them! Those people you call competitors are so free. They laugh, they have fun. But us, look at us! we're too tense in facing everything. Everything, Jim!

"You're allowed to leave this company anytime you want. I don't need a man like you!"

"Guys, please... stop it! We're drawing too much attention. Jim, breathe, you need to relax or your blood pressure will increase again."

"Hell, with my blood pressure!"

"John, maybe you should calm yourself a little, too."

"Cyntia, darling, you're being too kind to this old man. He's always being spoilt by you."

"You son of a..."

"Jim,,, calm down. You know what happen if we can't keep our voice down, right?"

"She's right. we don't want nurse Thalia to come here, do we?"

"Oh, shut up, you idiot! I don't need you to tell me what to do."

"Jim, look! She's coming."

"I told you."

"Good afternoon, guys!"

"Good afternoon, nurse Thalia."

"Afternoon,"

"Good afternoon, nurse. You look beautiful as always."

"Thank you, John. And you look great. Is everything alright here, Cyntia? Jim doesn't look good, obviously."

"Yes, we're fine. It's just the usual..."

"You two argue about something again?"

"Jim makes a fuss over a small thing nurse, that's what happened."

"Shut up!"

"Owh, Jim you know the rules. You are allowed to have meeting here as long as you don't make noises that can bother the others."

"Yes, nurse. But this idiot keeps giving his share away to people. I just told him that he shouldn't do that. It's against the rules of our company."

"Jim is right, John. It's against the rules we have here too. Your share is for you, not for others. Anyway, what did you give and to whom did you give it?"

"Apple pie, to Linda. She loves apple pie, nurse, and I love her."

"Owh, I see. But next time, you have to eat all your apple pie yourself. If you want to give some to Linda, then you have to work to earn extra apple pie. Cook Martin would be happy to give you some work. Now, all of you have to go back to your room. Dr. Clark will visit each of you in 20 minutes."

"Ok, nurse Thalia. Do you think Dr. Clark will join my company if I ask him?"

"I don't know. Maybe you should ask him yourself. Now go!"

"Nurse Thalia!"

"Yes, nurse Mayne?"

"They play company members again?"

"Yes."

"Poor, Jim. Maybe if his company hadn't gone bankrupt he wouldn't be a crazy man like he is today."

"Yeah,,, But at least he has friends here."

"Agree."

"Nurse Thalia, nurse Thalia!"

"Nurse Lyle, what happened? Breathe!"

"The patient in room 403 goes crazy."

"Everyone here is crazy nurse Lyle. It's mental facility."

"She was calm at first, then suddenly she screamed and started to scratch her face, pulled her hair and stuff."

"Oh, god..."

"Nurse Bryan is trying to calm her now. but she's very strong, help..."

"let's go..."

"You two go ahead, I'll get some sedative."

"Thanks nurse Mayne. Let's go!"

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That's 833 words.

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