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Author: Dreams_In_A_Book

Title: One Shot Vengeance

Short summary: Mermaids are made to be fictional characters of beautiful myth. But that's the story told by sailors. The sailors that killed the women. The women that adapted, transforming into mermaids.

And now they want vengeance.

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Review:

This story is very interesting. I love how your use of imagery made a distinct picture in my head. I really hope you continue with this story. I also thought of was great to use that quote in the media, but maybe instead of that you can add that as a little prologue type thing (sorry idk how to describe it) before you start the story.

Your characterization was really good. Your characters weren't flat. You characterized them, and gave them each personalities. The main character's reaction to being thrown off the ship and offered to participate in vengeance is great!

I think you kind of sped your plot up a little, because the MC was thrown off the boat meets some mermaids and automatically goes to kill them. Without slowing the story to a drag, you could expand more. Especially with the part when the MC meets the mermaids.

Looking at your dialogue, I noticed there's a few quick fixes. If the dialogue ends with '?' Or '!' The first word of the dialogue tag should be lowercase, unless it is a proper noun. You did a very nice job not repeating the same dialogue tag.

With the quality of your story, there really isn't much to say except please continue writing this story.

Sorry my reviews aren't a ton of pages long, but I am honest with what I say about them.