This is my first fan-fiction, and I think its horrible, compared to other Dramione stories, but I ABSOLUTLY NEED YOUR HONEST OPINION It won't hurt me if you say its terrible, but i need honesty!:) Thanks:) Enjoy:D~Lily (my indents and all other stuff was changed in making this note)
We landed hard on the ground. The first thing I saw was giant wrought-iron gates and at the top said 'MALFOY' followed by a long cobblestone driveway. Harry, Ron and I were all tied up separately, each being gripped onto by a different snatcher, I had Greyback, he smelled terrible, like a dog without a bath. I couldn't tell who had the others because I was in first, because I was a 'Mudblood' just as Greyback kept repeating every time he looked at my 'filth'. We reached the black castle like house. And that's when it hit me. I was terrified, I had dirty blood, and no dark wizard thinks I'm worthy of anything, and they would take pleasure in seeing how dirty my blood was. Greyback ripped open the door and met Narcissa, Draco's mother inside. "We have the Potter boy!" Greyback exclaimed. "Follow me" she said urgently, "Draco is in there." She said pointing to a pair of black doors."He'd be able to identify him. I'll take their stuff inside, Wait a moment." She then left us waiting in the dark hall outside the doors. We weren't standing there longer than thirty seconds when we heard a loud high-pitched scream. Our Snatchers shuffled a bit, flashing worried glances at each other. "They Brought this??" I heard someone scream. "Yes, Greyback found it in their tent." Narcissa said gently. "Bring them in."
Greyback was again the first to go forward. He pushed open the doors and pulled me inside. At first I only noticed Draco and Lucius sitting down in chairs, by an empty fireplace. I looked around at complete black, the walls, ceiling and furniture was black. The only bit of color was a hint of green now and then. As I was looking around I noticed someone I didn't before, The person who screamed, Bellatrix Lestrange. The death eater I hated the most, she tortured Neville's parents, killed Harry's only family left; Sirius, fed on sadness, and laughed at pain. "Who are they?" She asked with a grin, walking closer. "We have the Potter boy, and a Weasley, and a mudblood, if it is the Potter boy. Narcissa said Draco could identify Potter if it was him. Draco?" Draco looked at his father and Stood up. He walked over to Harry and stared. It must have been difficult to identify with the stinging jinx I put on him, his face was really messed up. "Well Draco?" Greyback insisted. But he got no answer, Draco kept staring. "Draco, is it him or not?" his father snapped. "I'm not sure, I .. I don't know." "Draco if we identify Potter, everything will be forgiven! What about the mudblood? Is she the one traveling with Potter?" Draco stepped towards me, looked at my face, not my eyes. "yeah...maybe" Draco responded hesitantly. "and is this the Weasley boy?" Bellatrix asked. Draco then took a step towards Ron. "yeah, it could be." he said unsure. She looked Draco straight in the face "That's the mudblood?" she asked in a whisper, as she pointed to me. Draco nodded but keeping his head down. Bellatrix glared at me for a minute before speaking "Greyback put them in the cellar, while I decide what to do." Greyback began pulling us away. But then she spoke again. "all except the mudblood"
Greyback grinned and stayed as Ron and Harry were Being dragged away. "NO! TAKE ME INSTEAD!" Ron Shouted "SHUT UP BLOOD TRAITER! If she dies your next." Bellatrix began walking around me. "So" she said coolly. "your the mudblood that's been helping Mr. Potter eh?" she continued to circle around me like a vulture, her giant hair surrounding her pale face. "Now, your a clever girl, would you like to tell me where you got this sword?" at first I didn't answer. "ANSWER ME!" " we found it..we found it in the woods" " TELL THE TRUTH!" "No we haven't please!" I begged, shaking in my shoes. "You are a FILTHY LYING MUDBLOOD. WHAT ELSE DID YOU TAKE? TELL ME! OR I'LL SLICE YOU" " we didn't take a thing!!!" She then got so close I could smell her breath. "Proudest mudblood I've ever met... DISGUSTING!" She then grabbed my shoulder and pushed me onto the floor, where I started crying. "WHAT.ELSE.DID. YOU . TAKE?" I just shook my head, crying my whole body shaking. "ANSWER ME!" I was shaking violently, not answering her. " CRUCIO!" My whole body convulsed in agony, it felt like my bones and muscles were being pulled and twisted, the only thing I could do was scream. Then, Bellatrix on her knees by my left side, lifted my sleeve to my elbow "TELL ME THE TRUTH YOU FILTHY MUDBLOOD!" and I saw a glint of silver and then terrible pain and I screeched.
