A review for my friends' book (who requested it)!
Author: _itz_shifana
Title: Emerald Hope Of Life
5/5
A unique and beautiful title!
Summary: Perfect - you used rhetorical questions that had an effect of curiosity and that helps to engage the reader!
5/5
Spelling, Punctuation And Grammar (SPAG): You have good spelling but your punctuation can be improved. You overused ellipses (...) which made it hard to follow. Try to use different/sophisticated devices (like semicolon, colon, brackets, dash).
3/5
Characters: Your characters are well built up and original. It would be even better if you gave them a back story and explain it as you go along instead of all at once (instead of having a flashback where you did all of Emeralds past, you could havr done a little only to really attract the readers attention).
4/5
Overall: A great book that is an original idea. You have manu thoughts and ideas in this hook that are simply divine but they need to be introduced it a more sophisticated manner. Use a range of punctuations and less ellipses. Try to use different language techniques to engage the readers attention or else as you go along with the book, many readers will start to lose interest due to the same writing method over and over. Techniques like metaphors, similes, hyperbole and extended metaphors are great ways to get started.
17/20
Hope this helps and please don't take anything to offence I am just suggesting ways to improve! I tried keeping it brief so you can easily see where you went well and where you could improve.
-Jazzi❤ (Jasmine969946)
