Decency

Not a real update?? Please read A/N

"W H A T   D O   Y O U   M E A N   T H E   P O I N T S   A R E   I N   B A L A N C E????!!"

"Listen Luce—"

"N O N S E N S E!!"

"If you'd just let me ex—"

<<SLAM>>

"Or not you fucking asswi— I mean, hello father how are you?"

Gabriel corrects himself just a little too late but he knows his father won't punish him. At least right now... at least not that badly.

"What is your older brother throwing a fit about now?"

"U-uhm well, there's this female who's going to die soon.."

"How long?"

"A year or so... cause undetermined."

"Un?? What do you mean undetermined?"

"Well, we can't generate a cause until her final destination is determined."

"You said she has a year left, that should already be decided."

"Welllll not exactly, see as you designed it:

<<%Entering CDDt: Core Death Dynamics tutorial%>>

"A person's final destination is decided based on how many good or bad points they generate during their already decided life span, summed up to their decency points/level. And if it's above 50%, even by .001, they go to their heaven. However, if they score even a .001 below 50%, they go down to Luce for their determined fate..."

<<%Ending CDDt%>>

"Exactly! So why is there a problem? It's not like she's balanced haha!"

"Except that's exactly the problem... she's been 50% for the last 5 years, she's balanced... meaning none of us get her, and unless her score is changed either way... her death will be cancelled."

"BUT SHE CAN'T BE IN BALANCE!! WE NEED HER TO BEAT LUCIFER!!!!!"

"Dad... I-I know.. that's why he's throwing a tantrum. Because he wants to beat you... But!! Anyway, I have a solution to propose!"

"And it is?"

"Let's hold a little game..."

"I'm listening..."

"Oh my dear older brother, how thoughtful of you to join us now."

"Cut the crap and get on with this game Gabe, I've got more important things to do."

Gabe rolled his eyes and huffed before explaining the plan to his father and brother... basically it boils down to this:

(1) Each "side" (heaven or hell) gets to pick a "persuader" (an angel or demon) they think is the strongest or most.. well.. persuasive.

(2) These chosen two will insert themselves into the balanced human's life and try and get them to make the decisions needed to change their score.

(3) The "side" who ends up winning gets bragging rights for 3 millenium

(4) Done!!

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Wow I never actually counted the words but damn.. this episode in the comic is one of the largest files and holds the longest pages to fit all the drawn explanation. But now, looking at just the words without all the actual comic, it's damn short!

Either way, I'm sorry this is such a short and kinda confusing chapter. I know one of the new characters is never named and that the "voices" are kinda hard to keep track of, but that's kinda the effect I want?? Like this whole thing loosely hangs off of religion and so the characters, when mentioned, are easy to figure out and know right away. But religion in itself is a confusing mess in my opinion. So keeping this whole chapter really loose and having the conversation really rely on the reader being able to keep track of Gabriel talking in order to orientate themselves with the other voices/dialogue is something I feel fits.

However, this is subject to major change and I will most likely change how it is written. As this chapter is heavily focused on giving more information on the world this is set on and just building the environment more, I don't think I really want such a confusing mess of things.

Since this is an early update and I will most likely have time to rewrite this over the next days, a better version will most likely come out Thursday, on schedule.

Though, I want your thought, should the re-update be just world building information to give more context overall? Or should it be part of the actual story (which will include a lot of time/place jump cuts) and introduce the characters to make this whole thing go faster?

Please vote by commenting below:

(1) World Building! Background Information! More Overall Context!

(2) Get on with the story, you egg.

So.. cool thanks, see you Thursday for real.