This is one of my first poems that I attempted to write. I'm just wondering what you guys think? Is there any promise in the work? Should I keep at it?
It's about a girl I was involved with. I hope you all enjoy it.
Tanned Gold
It was a breeze or stroke of wind you feel
Battering you down, sun scorching your lips
Yet the battle of heart is fought elsewhere,
In familiar yet undisclosed places,
Being of no real shape nor knowing form.
A name, simply a couplet of letters
More than fine letters, a marriage of sounds
Families of syllables that in my life
Have more bettered than all books or speeches.
The mere print of the contour evoke the
Deepest emotions within like the first
Ray of light cutting the dark of winter.
Seconds never seemed to last like a life,
Of an eternal clock that seems neither
To tick nor tock.
Time falls into her eyes halting all life,
Breathing slowly, missing not an instant
To be loved.
Like an apple on the tallest tree she
Rests, untouchable and pure, unwilling
To be spoiled by the simple desires,
Still clinging to the branch that cares no more
Feet go numb with coldness, eyes swollen as
Confrontation is met with the answer.
Yet the feeling of love is still as sharp
As the jagged pearl she kept only to
Discard into the ocean's tide so fast.
Time moves on, the world busies with itself,
Yet a statue frozen in profound
Deep delight longing for a moment way gone
Like a child from her mothers hands
Taken by the light from whence it came
Thanks guys!
