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After the movie, naruto took hinata home. He opened the door for her and helped her out of the car. |i had a great time, naruto-kun| "Yeah me too!" |c..can we do it again some time?| "Yeah I would love to, hinata." Naruto walked her to her door and she began to unlock it. "Hinata, Look at me." Naruto said softly. She turned and noticed he was looking at her lips. ||oh my god!! Is this really happening?|| she asked herself in her head. Naruto leaned closer, tilted her chin up slightly, and kissed her softly. After about 5 seconds, she pulled away and her already red face turned into a dark crimson. "Hinata, im sor..." She interrupted him with a hug. |naruto-kun, I've waited...thank you.| she tried not to cry as she unlocked her door and disappeared into the darkness of her house. Naruto smiled. When he got home, he found a note from tsunade on his dinner table along with a cheque. The note said "good news! I have transferred your berries into Ryo. There is enough dough here to buy a house Naruto, so don't spend it all in one place, you knucklehead. Naruto was happy, but too tired to care. In the morning, naruto went to granny tsunade's place and asked if he could buy a real house with his Ryo. Tsunade took files out of her desk drawer. "These are the houses available with how much money you have. "Ok thanks granny tsunade!" Naruto took the files and went to each house but none of them caught his eye. He was about to head back when he saw hinata walking with ino and sakura. "Hey!!! You guys!!!!" Naruto ran over and hinata shyly looked away. "So naruto, I hear you and hinata had quite the time last night." Sakura said as she slapped him on the back. Naruto blushed and nervously scratched the back of his head. "So I'm trying to pick a house but I can't choose one. Can you guys help me?" Sakura grabbed the paper from his hand and looked through them. "What's wrong with this one?" She pulled a paper from the bottom of the pile and gave it to him. "Oh I must have missed this one." Naruto looked over the paper and a smile grew on his face. "This is perfect!!! You guys wanna come check it out with me? "Yeah sure." Sakura replied.
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When they get to the empty house, before they even get inside, naruto has decided this will be his home. "Wow! It has a hot tub built into the back porch!" Ino shouted from the back yard. "Yeah I know!" sakura shouted back "the bedrooms are huge!" Later, they all come back to the living room. "So what do you guys think?" |I...I love it, naruto-kun.| replied hinata. "Yea it's great!" Sakura added. Ino was still looking around. "Well then it's settled. I'll fill out the form then send it to granny." Naruto looked at the form. "Uhh...sakura, could you fill out the form for me? I don't know what these words mean." hinata laughed. Later that day, naruto spent all evening packing his stuff to his new house. "Naruto, why aren't you making your shadow clones help you?" Kakashi said as he was perched on the power line. "Oh yeah! Kakashi sensei, you're a genius!!" "no, I'm just not an idiot." Kakashi replied. "Ha. Ha. Ha." Naruto said sarcastically. That night, when naruto finished moving in, he and his clones collapsed from exhaustion. He has a dream about hinata. The next day, he couldn't stop thinking about her. He texted sakura.
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Hey sakura>
<Hey naruto! What's up?
Ntm. I need some advice.>
<...about hinata?
Yea. When is it ok for me to ask her out again?>
<She just asked me the same kind of thing lol
Really? She wants me to ask her? >
<yea. no duh! She was sad that you didn't ask her when we were at your new house!
Ok. I'm going to text her later today! Thanks sakura>
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Naruto was excited and he wanted to impress hinata. He decided to make her dinner. The cook on the pirate ship had taught him how to cook and naruto was pretty good at it. That evening, He prepared the recipes for a small rice dish and hand made sushi, along with a pot of his famous home made ramen. He excitedly texted hinata.
YOU ARE READING
Hinata, you're...wow
عشوائيNaruto has returned to the village. Will he finally realize Hinata's interest in him?----my first fan fiction and story ever so please don't hate if it sucks. Helpful criticism is appreciated but don't go overboard please and thank you