Little Messages I Think You Should Know

I Love You

This is literally one of the first serious poems that I've written from last year. I know it's not great but hopefully with other poems you can watch my work progress..??
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Once upon a time,
In a town far away,
There was a beautiful girl
Whose mind tended to stray.
She was walking perfection,
Or as close as one can get.
She means everything to me
But she doesn't know it yet.
I try to make her smile,
Keep her happy all the time.
I want to keep her close,
Make her laugh, make her mine.
She's wild and obsessive,
Crazy and carefree,
But she also has a soft side
That no one seems to see.
She calls me crying late at night,
I want to catch her tears.
She tells me what's on her mind.
I try to silence her fears.
I can't really comfort her,
But, oh, I wish I could.
And I'll keep trying anyways,
Like I feel I should.
I do my best because I know
She's more than just a friend.
She's the one thing that made me glad
September wasn't the end.
If she were to read this
I don't know what I'd do,
But what I hope you take from it is
******, I love you.

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Whaddya think? I need feedback. Btw, the September thing, I attempted suicide on September 15 2014, so that's why that's there... just a little fyi.. I actually told the girl I wrote this for the poem and she seemed to pretend to like it. I know it's not great but is it really that bad geez idek. Oh well. Comment. Constructive Criticism please???