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"Why don't we expect to see rainbows after every storm? What we don't understand is rainbows are not the result of the end of the journey. They're a part of our journey."
☼ TITLE (3/3 points): I personally think the title is perfect for the story, oh my God, it literally is, I couldn't possibly suggest a better option than that one, it's different, it has a connection with the story, everything's perfect.
☼ COVER (2.5/5 points): I think the cover is cute, the title and username are visible (I love the font you used for the username) and I like the fact that they're in the bottom right of the cover, it looks good. But, it doesn't let the reader know if the story is with Namjoon or not, it could be with someone else and I know it's written on the title of your book, but when I open your profile on my phone and search for this specific book, it only shows part of the title, so it'd be great if you could put Namjoon on the cover. Or at least write his name on it.
☼ DESCRIPTION (7/7 points): I have nothing against the description, you have a small description of your story where you talk about Neena and about a guy, you have a quote, you don't say too much, you don't need to add anything as well. And it also made me curious about the story. PERFECT.
☼ FIRST IMPRESSIONS (10/10 points): Damn, I loved the way you started it, I wouldn't change a single thing about it. It is, without a doubt, very different from what I'm used to see and I got even more excited to read your story than I was when I opened the first chapter. It made me really excited to read the rest and I wish I could have read it faster, BUT DAMN ASSIGNMENTS RGJVSDF anywaaaaays, PERFECT AS WELL, DING DING DING, NEXT!
☼ PLOT (22/25 points): Okay, I have to take a few points out of here now. Your plot is common, but somehow, pretty different. How can I explain this... The idea of a lost girl, who doesn't know what she wants to do, she doesn't know herself, she's scared, she's just terrified of the world... and then a boy comes to "save her", is not very original. The way you wrote it, it's different and it's amazing. The nicknames they have, NAMJOON'S CHARACTER, the small and beautiful quotes here and there, the way they meet, the way they talk, without sharing too much of how they feel about each other... it's just incredible and it made me cry my heart out. And that's what makes your book stand out from the others. I'm happy I got the chance to read something that, at first glance, looks like another typical love story, but when you dig into it, you find something beautiful, touching and addicting, something that feels so real. A dream you don't want to wake up from. A dream that you don't want to end but at the same time, one that you, so badly crave to know the end.
☼ CHARACTERS (13.5/15 points): As I said above, Neena's character is a bit common. I like her story and I love the fact that she's "the lost soul", but her background is not something that different. BUT I loved to see how much she changed throughout the chapters, it made me so happy. I absolutely loved Namjoon's character, the "moonchild". God, I loved it so much, he's perfect. I ALSO LOVED THEIR RELATIONSHIP, DAMN THEY'RE SO CUTE. And even though they're not as important as the main characters, her mom is the sweetest, just like her sister, but her dad is a dumbass, I'M SORRY BUT I HAVE TO TELL THE TRUTH. I'm happy Neena talked to her mother about her feelings and showed her, her true colors.
☼ YOUR WRITING STYLE (18/20 points): I'd say you're going pretty strong so far and being this one, one of the most important parts of the story, I'm ecstatic to tell you that you almost deserve the whole damn score here. I love the way you present the words to the reader and how the story is connected to the characters. The sentences start and end well, but those parts when you're specifically talking about Neena and Namjoon as "the lost soul" and "moonchild", respectively, you repeat the same word lots of times. I think I know why you do it but it's repetitive and to me, it doesn't sound very good. Some sentences should be longer. For example, "You dread to do it but decide to check your messages. You left so many of your friends on read." Maybe you should transform those two sentences in one, like "You left so many of your friends on read that you dread to do it, but you decide to check your messages." Use some more commas and use periods when necessary, don't overuse any of them. The descriptions are fabulous and you write them often, which is good, it makes the story sound fantastic, almost melodious.
☼ GRAMMAR (13/15 points): I know it's hard and I know how english can be confusing sometimes, it is confusing for me too. But, you change from present tense to past tense very often and even though your writing is very diverse (you don't use the same verb, adjective or words in general too many times), you have some mistakes. I remember one mistake I noticed when I was reading, I don't remember where I found it though, but I can search for it later. You wrote "... talk to people through texts, but would be exhausted if it was overdone, so you stopped checking messages." It should be exhausting instead of exhausted. Honestly, in my opinion, none of your mistakes are bad enough to distract the reader from the book, especially because you don't have that many.
☼ TOTAL SCORE (89/100 points): The best score so far! I absolutely loved your book, it has everything, sad moments, happy moments, emotional moments. GOD MY HEART WAS CONFUSED, I DIDN'T EVEN KNOW HOW I SHOULD FEEL! It was a rollercoaster but I loved every second of it. I admit I'm a bit curious about how their relationship is going to be after all the time they spent without talking to each other, so if you're planning on writing a sequel, TELL ME WHERE DO I HAVE TO SIGN UP BECAUSE I'M UP FOR IT! I hope I wasn't too harsh. Love you <3
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