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This store caters for all your needs. We have tents (book covers), compasses (beta reading services) and maps (reviews). Come on in!
*Deep breath* As a beta reader I shall first of all focus on grammar and punctuation.
"Im not sorry for those things which I did." He said.
NO.
"I'm not sorry for the things I did," he said.
This is a very basic example. What I would likely do, if I beta read that, is to kick thing up a notch.
"I'm not sorry for the things I did," he whispered, the fire in his eyes contrasting starkly with the softness of his words.
I would ask you why he said it. Was he apologetic or defiant? And so on. I would then add "something like that" at the end, to remind you it's still your book and I'm totally not trying to take over with my suggestions *chuckles suspiciously*
Of course, my writing style will differ from yours but suggestions like showing not just telling, and ensuring your characters aren't flat work for everyone. ——— I can either leave my comments in line or in a google doc. This is completely up to you.
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^That could be us (if we ignore the fact that they turned on each other.)
