Take on Things (Critique Shop)

Hello, I am Bokkie Dee! If you want feedback for your story, you're in the right place. Take on Things is a writing critique shop where I try to give constructive feedback and opinions about your piece. [OPEN]

So, It's You

I was so fed up with my stressful life as a high school teacher. Paano kasi, favorite akong pagdiskitahan ng mapang-alipustang boss ko. Mabuti na lang at nasa working environment ko ang stress reliever slash ultimate crush kong si Jiro Elizalde. I do believe may "something" na sa amin ni Jiro. Kahit wala kaming label...

Estrella Cruzada ⋮ ᴏɴɢᴏɪɴɢ ⋮

A princess whose past is shrouded in mystery, yet she shares a timeless love story. Despite being overlooked by her parents, she has found her prince charming, embodying the essence of a classic fairytale. However, Aria is not a princess. The moment she stepped into a novel that ignited a revolution among her people...

The Next Night (Masked Gentlemen Series 1)

Kina believed that she's not pretty and will never be pretty. Marami siyang tigyawat, maitim at payat kung i-describe ng kanyang prangkang best friend na si Sol. Bukod sa pisikal na kakulangan ay literal rin silang hikahos sa buhay. Sa gitna ng hirap ay nagawa nilang mabuhay ng maayos ngunit ng iwan sila ng kanyang am...

Love - All

[Anderdal Manor 1] Every year, the Guecos and the Tanjangcos spend the holidays at Anderdal Manor. For Lovi and Gabriel, this Christmas is different. Way, way different. DISCLAIMER: This story is written in Taglish.

And Then You

Inggo de Paz has a long line of girls waiting outside his door. He never thought Maureen Salas, his best friend's little sister, would be one of them. DISCLAIMER: This story is written in Taglish.

Champorado

WATTY'S SHORTLIST 2021 EDITOR'S PICK OCTOBER 2021 Jiya Valle learns too late that kissing her sworn enemy since high school Migo Salas doesn't come without repercussions. And to her, it's a secret she's going to bring with her down to her grave--but Migo has other plans. DISCLAIMER: This story is written in Taglish.

The Boys of Blueberries

Sabina Kyle is a woman of work; she's a model at the pinnacle of her game and the managing editor of The Fit, the number one fashion and lifestyle magazine in the country. But when it comes to fucking around with Tristan Bishop, Sabina has three rules: 1. No kissing. 2. No talking about it at work. 3. No feelings, no...

The Chances of Mary Jane Chaucer

Mary Jane Chaucer hasn't forgotten Seth. Even when the world already has. It's been two years since he left without a trace-turned into no more than a ghost-and Mary Jane knows nothing beyond his first name, the fact that he likes scrambled eggs, and that his heart is kind and Mary Jane owes him. A lot. What are the c...

Dagger Series #1: Unwritten

Lucienne Simons, also known as Lush Fox, is a best-selling mystery writer who is worshipped by millions of her fans. Everyone is eager to find out who she is, pero nanatiling tago sa publiko kung sino siya. Hanggang sa literal na nabuhay ang mga bagay na produkto lang noon ng kaniyang imahinasyon. To protect her, her...

Defy The Game (COMPLETED)

(Game Series # 6) Assia dela Serna's dream was to become a lawyer. Ever since she was little, she had dreamt of becoming one... But from a young age, she knew that her family wasn't financially capable of sending her to law school. Kaya naman bata pa lang siya, sinigurado niya na magiging maayos lahat ng grado niya. S...

TBBS1:The Writer's Billionaire Bachelor (COMPLETED) ✔

1st installment of The Billionaire Bachelors Series Cechxia Garcia is a writer on a mission. Kailangan nyang mainterview at magawan ng article ang limang bilyonaryong binata sa magazine company na pinagtatrabahuhan nya. Feeling nya ay kaya nyang gawin ito dahil pinaniniwalaan nyang siya'y isang tunay na henyo. Pero m...

The Billionaire's Wish

A billionaire met a runaway bride. Their first meeting was literally filled with fire and explosion! In an accident where fate and destiny propelled them toward each other. Highest ranking: #1 Chicklit - April 5, 2017 ChickLit ranking: #37 - March 2...

THE PLATERO TRILOGY 1: HUNDRED RINGS OF SILVER (UNEDITED VERSION)

THIS STORY IS PUBLISHED UNDER PRECIOUS HEARTS ROMANCES. Maraming sakit ng kalooban ang pinagdaanan ni Ethel, isang sikat na fantasy writer, kaya pinili niyang maglagay ng matayog na pader upang protektahan ang sarili. Lumayo rin siya upang makapagsimulang muli. Natagpuan niya ang panibagong buhay sa bayan ng Naguilian...

GIRL IN YOUR DREAM(Completed)

Sheryn Lleu Samañego-One of AMBERS CLAN SIBLINGS a daughter of Edward Colin Samañego.

DIS #1: Truly, Madly, Deeply ✓ (To Be Published under PSICOM)

COMPLETED ✔️ ⭐️ A RomancePH official "Kilig All Year 'Round" read. DAYLIGHT IN SAN GUEVARRA MINI SERIES BOOK 1 Umpisa pa lamang ay hindi na maganda ang impression na naiwan ni Ada kay Brent Esplana. Papaano'y disaster ang una nilang encounter; hindi sinasadyang nabato ni Ada ng itlog si Brent. Natural ay nagalit ito...

Apricity (Published under PSICOM)

Saying no is the constant dilemma of people with the biggest hearts. To them, refusing equates to rejecting. They tend to keep on doing favors until it's too much. Ngunit kailan nga ba masasabi kung sobra na? Einav Jynette R. Leyva is the sweetest soul in Calle Nueva. A people's person. A good mixer. A social butterfl...

OBLIVION 1: Wyatt Roberts (Soon To Be Published Under Bibliothéque Publication)

Wyatt Roberts is the chief executive officer of a well-known food enterprise in the Philippines. He already possesses everything, including wealth, good looks, and a healthy body. However, there is one thing he lacks: love. When his girlfriend betrayed him, he became cold-hearted and never loved again, believing that...

Something Beneath the Melody (The Runaway Girls Series #1)

The Runaway Girls Series #1 Euphony Rae Salazar is the perfect example of a woman with principles. Lahat gagawin niya upang umahon sa hirap dahil naniniwala siya na kung may pera ka mawawala na ang lahat ng problema mo. Nevertheless, no matter how challenging the journey to success may be, she would never compromise h...

Hiding the Green Carnation's Heirs | ✓

C O M P L E T E D W A R N I N G: MATURED CONTENT. READ AT YOUR OWN RISK. (DE AZARRO SECONDO) Virginity is one of the greatest gifts a woman can give her husband. That is what Calixta's parents told her but due to the influence of alcohol, she accidentally gave it to a stranger that she met in the bar. Two months later...

Invisible Line in Between

[NEW CLASSIC SERIES #1] Meet the lead vocalist of New Classic, Isaiah Kalen Mallari. A #Wattys2020 Winner story under Romance category.

Temptation Island: Broken Ties

Cecelib x Race Darwin x Makiwander Temptation Island's Monasterio Legacy

June Rain (Young Love Series #1)

PUBLISHED UNDER MANILA POP Young Love Series #1: Mearah June Escalera Romantic love is different for every person. For Mearah June Escalera, she believes that only those who are unique and special can experience it. Love is certainly not for someone like her--an average girl who, if in a movie, can only be an "extra."...

The Opposite of Hate (Upper Crust #1)

Laviña Clarene won't run out of reasons why she hates Aristotle. She hates how her life is always entangled with him, na kapag sinabing Laviña karugtong na nito ang Aris. She grew up with him, and even shares her family, not to mention their parents' history. But on top of that, she hates him for taking a big portion...

Wild One

The forbidden fruit that everyone wants to have a taste, a woman of the world, liberated, wild, and without a doubt, gorgeous - Odine Beateressa Santibaniez. She believes that with her beauty she can wrap a man in her fingers. She can have everything in just a snap. True enough, many are allured and the list goes on a...

My Yesterday's Moonlight (Yesterday #1)

(COMPLETED) (UNEDITED) Professor x Writer Ayla Lucia Del Rios, 22 years old, 4th year college and the nobody, loner, quiet girl in town.Ang babaeng Iba sa lahat ng babae (Strong and Brave) ika nga nila. Sanay na harapin ang lahat ng bagay ng mag-isa, sanay na harapin ang lahat ng problema, sanay na salubungin ang mga...

Every Step Away

Rugged Series #1 Chrysanthe Eve Lofranco only has Hezekiah Kingston Jimenez. She believes that life, no matter how hard, will always be bearable as long as she has him on her side. At dahil sa paniniwalang iyon ay pilit niyang ikinulong ang kanyang naghuhumiyaw at nagwawalang damdamin para sa kaibigan. Triggered by he...

Ruthless Beauty

The De la Rua heiress, in the brink of losing everything in her fairytale life is now fighting for her legacy and survival when a tragedy hits the beautiful, powerful family. And a mysterious young man, fueled by desire of the beautiful young woman will do anything to get what he wants, uncovering secrets after secre...

Mary Grace

She was raped. She was destroyed. She's always been alone despite the crowd of people surrounding her. A mentally unstable girl who is so close to cutting her wrist and ending her pain. Until he came. Her sister's boyfriend. CAUTION: READ AT YOUR OWN RISK. THIS STORY IS NOT FOR EVERYONE. BE OPEN-MINDED. THIS STORY MA...

Deceret Series #2: Bleed for Love

deceret (n.) latin word for "body to body" Czarina wants to commit suicide. Death is ready for her, she could feel it. Czarina, with her best friend, Sorcha, agreed that they would jump off a building together to end their shitty lives. Just when she was about to jump she felt a pair of strong hands wrapped around her...