@mohammed_0304 dnt bring urself down, when I say its 'good' I seriously mean it. I know its a broad answer but I need to read more of it to delve into specifics. Ur writing style is definitely above average and ur characters feel more than just words on paper. But If u feel like the book isnt portraying what u want it to, change it! Thats what I eventually did.
When I have time tommorow, I'll go back to comment the mistakes I found. And since I have my hands full with work and class for most of this week it'll take me a while to find some free time to read ur other work :') I promise to check it eventually tho!