@taevhyuvg I've just realized that I never replied to this, but I did read it last year.
If you would like my feedback (though it's far from professional) please let me know, I would be happy to give it! I would just like to say first that I am in an advanced creative writing class where we do workshops, which is basically reading our stories aloud and giving/hearing criticisms from other students, or simply saying what we liked particularly, and anything I say is only meant to build you up as a writer and not tear you down.
I also learn from communicating with other authors, it really gives me a confidence that I am not alone in my struggles. Furthermore, if something I do say offends you, please let me know, I wouldn't want to be rude at all.
Thanks for taking the time to read this message, it's really long. (Sorry)
