So, I was going to leave this as a reply to your comment on Chapter 3 of my book but I figured you might never get to read it so I'm putting it on here so that you can definitely see it.
Lennon actually doesn't try to be cool. In fact, she kind of detests popularity and the stereotypes that go along with it. She says "f*cking" because it's her favorite word and it's almost a reflex to her.
Teenagers say "like" a lot (Ex: It's so, like, cool that one direction, like, came to the US and, like, gave a concert) and I say awesome because I like the word. I'm so sorry that Lennon isn't as verbally gifted as you probably are what with your ability to restrain yourself from repeatedly using words.
As for it being pathetic, I think the votes on that one chapter disagree with that point. Or maybe 645 people just like to read something "pathetic" and you're the cool one. In that case, again, sorry.
I appreciate criticism, really I do - in fact, it was criticism similar to yours but said in a more polite and respectful way that made me change my writing style a bit for the 4th chapter. There's a POLITE way to tell someone that you don't like what they're doing or that what they're doing is subpar. Plus, the way you said it which - let me tell you, coming from a person who's written five chapters from the POV of a rather b!tchy and mean character - seems exceptionally bitchy.
Thank you.
And since you asked so nicely, she said f*cking (and variations thereof) a total of 37 times in that chapter.
Good day.
