145450mjr

@AngelaWu @AngelaWu 
          	Yeah, I just haven't looked at it in a LONG time... I joined a new website and they REALLY need my help. All of their writing sucks.

GemHiga

@145450mjr Okay, i tried reading your book...but before continuing on you might want to splice up your story. It's all very bunched up into one paragraph at times. You also need to divide your story into different chapters, as well as write a bio for your story so it will pull the readers in.
          
          Once you do that let me know and i'll take a look at it again, because as of now it's a bit hard to read.