M. K. Long

I think MK is a great writer. 
          Something that i would suggest for improvement  her story "My kittle dove" would be being more detailed about the characters, give us details to know exactly who they are, thar when something happens we can go "oh, that's something "X" would totally do" 
          And the other thing, SPOILERS:
          
          I would love to see more explanation of how Simon gets kidnapped, and the grandparents gets their memories erased and all of that. Because i feel like it happened in that world but the readers don't know it happened until they mention how they have to go find Simon because he was kidnapped , even though us readers only read that Teresa was transported into the other level while Simon and her grandma are just browsing around the market. And to be honest that was quite confusing. 
          
          Aside from that, you are doing awesome and i love this amazing story and passion we can see you have. 

While having a good beginning to a story that could be quite intriguing, Maddie could add some more detail, her writing is very brief, running through the scenes at a quick pace. There could be more natural conversation, and more emotion written into the characters and storytelling, but all this will come with experience, as this is written briefly after your first chapter was released, I would definitely hope to keep an eye on your works and see you grow as an author, keep up the good work, practice some grammar and adding emotion to your writing, and don’t be afraid to pull out the dictionary and thesaurus as they are our biggest source of learning new terms when writing. 
          
          I wish you all the best, and look forward to your next release.
          David Paradis