@HafsatAhmed4 Heyy
I am good thanks and I hope you are.
So I read your story. I think you could change some things to make it better. First off we have the reading perspective. Sometimes it is written with the caracter perspective and sometimes in the third perspective. That is totally ok, but you switch to the other without mentioning it. If it is written in the third perspective you don't need to write that it is Kylie POV (or someone els). That was more in the begging of the story. You also use too much '**' you don't need to put them, before every dialogs (eg: **"Kylie ... why do you look so tense"**). The " ... " are enough. Or just on normal words (eg: As Coles **black Lamborgini Revuelto**). You really don't need to put the little stars, you can just write it without, but if you really want to put something you can just write it in italics or in bold. If you use the stars, it makes the text less captivating, funny or serious, depending on the scene. You also write (sometimes) at the end of the chapter 'to be continued' but if it isn't the end of the story we know that there will be a next chapter.
Nevertheless, I loved the story. You describe perfectly everything, sometimes it's a bit confusing but it's really good. I love the cliffhangers at the end of every chapter. Continue like that. You have talent. And I'll be waiting on the next chapters.
Em
