@Dgdiotristan it is actually. great story and character. But, my main problem mainly is the grammar. Sure, the grammar is not that good and there are a lot of spelling mistakes, but, i understand it if you are not a native English speaker. Especially knowing that english and its grammar can be a challenging thing to learn from a lot of people outside of english speaking countries. i am sure and confident that when you continue writing stories you will advance your grammar and better the composition of each word and sentence. In turn, creating stories which will make tons of people enjoy and laugh with all the comedic jokes. (Or even cry if you're a gut puncher and have an interest in torturing your viewer's emotions and minds.)
Other than the grammar, everything is great. Love the comedic tone, love the story, and then love the characters.