keemo_da_legend

Hey do you like books with action... Then I think you would love this. It's a book I'm writing, if it isn't any trouble I'd like your opinion on it.
          
          Here: https://my.w.tt/UtJudhbEdQ
          
          Everyone else is welcome to read also. I need as much feedback as possible. :)

AKYokai

@keemo_da_legend No prob, dm me if I can help with anything else :)
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keemo_da_legend

@AKYokai no offense at all I'm actually glad you like it. It's in the build up phase tho but the action is on its way I promise you. Besides that I'm going to integrate elements of romance, fantasy and comedy in it to keep it interesting. I can't say how much I appreciated your help. Thank you
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AKYokai

@keemo_da_legend I've never really been a big fan of action books but I've taken a look at the first chapter of "The One Who Cried Wolf".  You have a really great writing style and I totally love the way you've described Chase's personality.  It makes me really sad about what happened to his village and father.  
            
            As I mentioned before, I'm not much of an action reader but am more into fantasy, sci-fi, heart-warming, and adventure, so my attention kept drifting off as I read it.  I'm not saying that you should change anything with your book, to be honest keep it.  But as a reader, I'd ask of you to set exciting schemes and plots so readers with different preferences would be hooked into your book no matter the genre.
            
            Thank you for giving me a chance to help you, I hope I helped in any way and sorry if I said anything offensive, it's one of my first time doing something like this. :)
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