Hey, so I read your work and I like it. You did a very good job in writing the story. I get that it is a futuristic battle story, so details are important and you have that. I don't get lose the concept of the story or lost in the details. I would as you to put more interactions with the characters with each other. Probably make them describe the details of the conflict or the scenery, thats a writers tip. Also do you plan to make it into a series, if so drama between characters is always the best to grab people's attention. In your description try to mention the main character that the reader will follow this way we know who to care about as we read. Hope this helps, but I think your doing a good job on it.
