@ valiryn2002 hi! So, first of all, I'm sorry if this message is coming a little later than I expected, but you know school started and I have been busy with trillions of things. Fortunately tho I've managed to read your book as you asked me to, and to tell you what a think of it. The story per se is interesting, maybe a little bit too rushed, but I liked it. I don't think there's anything to work on, maybe you should work more on the layout. That's everything that I've noticed, I hope it was helpful.
Best wishes,
XxGoldeneyexX