AaliciaLee

@sorrymate1 sure and thanks for the votes 

KimberleySBLieb

Hiya Sweetie
          
          Read your first chapter.  okay.  I know it is a draft but you need to read this better before you post it.  Print it out, easier.  Get a friend to look at it.  You don't have capitals for people's name.    Space it out more.  Need a bit of description.  Describe people, set the scene a bit more.  You got something, so run with it.  Your dialogue is good, it feels real.  Sometimes the spacing can look dramatic too.  Hope this helps.  Go for it.

CassidySavidi

In your blurb for 'I didn't Do it' you misspell meant (ment) and you're (your). Maybe you're trying to write like a 15 year old and did it on purpose? But, if you're worried about reads then that will put some people off immediately. If you don't care enough to check the spelling in your blurb then people will feel like you probably put in less work in the actual story.