@NavelTastesInk Ohk bro... definitely gonna improve it with next part...but the reason was in this navel writing community people used to make short stories so I was making short but as you said I will now turn the story and make it a Lil longer plus follow me if not cuz I have many amazing storie plots like these..
@NavelTastesInk Bro i like your story but try to make suspense don't make it to quick .... And try to make long story with some twists.... and great story it is