rose2q4e

Gentle Reader,
          Can you give some  precious moments of yours to read my first story.
          I sincerely appreciate your support and feedback.
          Thank you.
          
          
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/377116417?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=rose2q4e

Abizata

@rose2q4e sure, sure ofcs! Read mine while you are at it as well. Good luck with your work<3
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justt_kei_

Hey , i hope you are doing well. I'm currently writing a book called being his jo. if you are interested in these kinda story please don't hesitate to check it out. In return I can read your story too. And sorry if i bothered you.
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/362591936?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&wp_page=reading_part_end&wp_uname=justt_kei_

Abizata

@justt_kei_ omggg, I didn’t see this. I'm definitely reading it<3
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Yandere_Nayavu

Yo, I went through your story, and so far, there are not any chapters, which is fine. But once you get more chapters up, I would suggest combining a lot of those authors notes. Most people don't want to go through six chapters of little to nothing.
          
          I would suggest putting trigger warnings before each chapter, vs only having it in one chapter beforehand. 
          
          I am actually really interested in the plot, however. I always like the mafioso type stories. Lol.  
          
          My next suggestion is one that doesn't have to be used, because it's all about writing style, but if you are looking to make your readers cringe while reading the gore, it's good practice to follow this rule. I'ma bullet point it down below.
          
          •if you're writing actions or feelings, show, don't tell.
          For instance;
          If you are showing a setting that is empty, and more plains like, then don't describe what the trees could look like, describe how empty it looks. Why it's empty. Is it supposed to be empty?
          That kind of thing.

Abizata

@Yandere_Nayavu omg I read everything, and yes, I am on the right track when it comes to the gore.  I've made a lot of improvements from my previous prologue after comparing it to my actual work. Thank you very much for the guidance, lovely human
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Yandere_Nayavu

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@Yandere_Nayavu That works differently, however, with things like gore and smut. Crude, violent depictions of both can help improve the scene.
            
            'I pushed the knife into his skin,  watching as it made it's way deeper and deeper. The sound of the flesh squelching under the pressure was enough to put me on edge. Next, I move onto his hands. He had used these to touch what was mine. Now, he wasn't going to be allowed to use those hands to touch anything again. I pulled out a saw, that was slightly rusted. I brought it to his wrist and began my work. With each push back and forth, the man under me writhed and screamed in pain. Pleading for me to stop. 
            
            "Please...oh fuck..." He was crying now. 
            
            "What? You scared? Little bitch." I growled, and pushed the saw back and forth at an uneven pace. I grinned as  blood spurted and bones began to show themselves. It wasn't long before the hand was off. Then, I grabbed it, and shoved the bloody side into his mouth. His last meal.'
            
            The graphic depiction of pain, and trauma, helps the scene, along with the uncomfortable motion that this man is perfectly fine with forcing cannibalism.
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Aang151Rron

Heyy follow back
          And check out my works
          
          DREAMTOPIA & THE OTHER WORLD THE PROPHESIED ONE 
          
          I think you'd like this story: "Dreamtopia - THE FIRST CHAPTER" by AJ151Skullz on Wattpad https://www.wattpad.com/story/236494953?utm_source=android&utm_medium=whatsapp&utm_content=share_reading&wp_page=library&wp_uname=Aang151Rron&wp_originator=xyLay6A%2B9c%2B%2BxqQjhGcjX174btdkIIoYe9JCTPEJeFivw0ndFOs0ykuTnuBqtZaDGKHXMVnc6rVFxW%2BZwNxVF92SFHKvIb6Jrwm4JfDDvR0TOlVH32KsKVeLE2l%2Ftfd1
          
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unique_is_ella

@abizata thanks a lot, you are really the only one motivating me to write my story really
          I'm a new writer and I'd really appreciate it if you all support me 
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/352009555?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=unique_is_ella&wp_originator=LHyntIMhjPSMCEWciDhmLumdZoLU3JoyafrzjsbEMWz3ttk17FWi%2Fr4%2BXAGTNEXDQUL0IYsZ81GF8P%2BHZjhXguq7CEsYqnsAJoJXwmklrbF41haBnkeZNCnVDV2%2BfetP
          
          Really sorry for posting my link here but pls check out my story

unique_is_ella

@Abizata I’ll read it and give u feedback
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Abizata

@unique_is_ella hi Ella, I am working on a new book, and I hope for you to read it and give me feedbacks. Would really appreciate it<3
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unique_is_ella

@abizata >>> thanks sm
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