Gud pm AcNoLimitations :)
First of all I would like to take this opportunity to say thank you for giving me the chance to critic your work :)
Ok, lets start:
The title: Very catchy sya although the cover sabi ng isip ko ay korean no nomon :) im not against the kpop fans but medyo nkakasawa n kc sya eh :) try to make it like an object or something that the reader catches its attention :D just like the twilight saga books ;)
The Characters: Well portraited, pero nghahanap ako ng xfactor, yung characters na sasabihin ko, ay gusto ko tong subaybayan :)
The Story: Very Smooth, the tone/mood was there, Nice ang simula ng story. Uniqueness lng ang hinahanap ko, just like what I always say to the stories n crinitic ko. Try putting a substance na hindi aakalain ng reader na meron nun ;)
>suggestions: apply some filipino values na may mapupulot ang mga readers, dont always stick to the kpop idea, make it versitile :)
So ayun lng i hope nkatulong ako for the future development of your story and im looking forward to your next work ;)