I posted this on my tumblr, but I thought I'd go ahead and mention here, too:
I'm going to rewrite DM ch 16 before moving on to 17, because YIKES I just reread it. One of the worst chapters I've written, it feels too rushed and artificial. Granted, I WAS rushed while writing, and I think that reflected on the story.
Also, I don't say 'constructive criticism is greatly appreciated' at the end of every chapter for nothing! If anyone thinks any part of the chapter could be better, please tell me! Nicely, of course. I write to improve my skills, and I want to write good stories for you all! :)