@Fayeloveslevi something can look out for is that there is a few grammatical errors. Something that could be added onto the story is that Ryder could take Athena on an actual date or vice versa

I’m so glad! It’s still incomplete as well as mid-way through editing! There are things I absolutely adore about this story but also things I want to improve and change as I go one! Is there anything you would like be either taken away, added on, or changed? Coming from a constructive criticism point of view! 

@Fayeloveslevi  I loved your story so much. I was just looking for a new book and clicked on yours and I instantly fell in love with it.