Budiiiing
May iko-comment lang ako. Wag mo i-take negatively ha. This will help to improve your writings. Lakihan mo yung space kasi kapag ganyan aakalain nila mahaba baka tamadin silang basahin. Every paragraph 3 to 4 sentences lang ang gawin mo tapos yung kadugtong sa next paragraph na ulit. Comment lang ha :)))
NorthStarru
oo nga.. pero interesting naman ung story ....
depende na lang kung interesado kang magbasa