@Agyeyasi
Please don't be disheartened it's just my honest review and I think you can do much better.
@Jungkook_ff7 Oh no silly! Reviews and feedbacks are nothing but a blessing . I'll work on them !
I have read your story and I have pointed out some flaws in it.
First- I will suggest you be cautious while writing, you need to capitalize words after the quotation marks. There were more punctuation errors.
I will advise you to go through your chapter before publishing it. There is a preview option.
Second- Read more and observe how other authors write. It makes a big impact if you observe one's style.
All is perfect except these things which I pointed out.
@Jungkook_ff7 Hi fellow author on the internet! First of all thanks a lot for reading my first attempt at writing. I guess I must have been in 9th or 10th when I first published this , and being a wattpad teenager I became discouraged and disheartened quiet early on in this book that I was curating . So it has filled my heart with immense joy to even see someone visit this book, nonetheless even comment about it . Even now as I look back, I can point out the exact same things that you've mentioned , hence your feedback is highly values. So thank you !! Maybe one day I'll start publishing here again , when I am satisfied with what I write ! Once again thank you so much for taking out some time to go through what a 16 year old dreamt and wrote about . It has surely made her day!