EnThea💓

Hi guys, I have an old version and new version of First Kiss. Please vote if I would post my:
          
          -Old version?
          
          -New version?
          
          
          Or would I just simply combine the two? 
          
          Please help me this time. I would gladly appreciate it :)

Hey EnThea~~First of all thanx for following me. You won't be disappointed. I like what you're doing with "First Kiss." It has all the ingredience of a real page turner for your teen readership. As a writer of this genre , romance and chickLit, I have analysed the WP audience and come to a few conclusions about them. As you are probably aware some 90% of the fiction on here is both written and read by females--mostly young  (14-35). It's important to note also that most of these readers, an estimated 89%, read their fiction while in transit or home alone on hand-held devices (smartphones or tablets). This requires us writers to compose short, intense chapters, serialized in a formula that leaves them hanging at the end of each, to pick it up religiously the next time around. You seem to be doing this pretty well so far and have an impeccable textural style (your English teacher should be proud).
          
          For my tastes, however, (maybe because I'm in my mid-twenties and have the all naughty experience it usually dictates), I would like to see a little more sexxual tension in your ensuing chapters--teetering on, and sometimes dipping into the sexxual atmosphere more--either when your protagonist is with significant company . . . or alone, as I have  boldly done in a few stories. Let's not forget that even younger teens today are sexting each other and the incidence of females  viewing porn has risen significantly. Your hormonal little beauties out there are waiting for some fresh meat to be thrown at them now and then to keep turning your pages. 
          As an example of how this works, allow me to send you a short story of mine that really was an experiment--actually to see the parameters of the female readers' wants and  tolerances.
          
          Check out the following story FYI--"Part 4" was given a "R-Private" rating for followers only .
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/16999941-a-walk-in-the-countryside
          https://www.wattpad.com/52450827-a-walk-in-the-countryside-part-4
          Enjoy.
          ~~Califia

Hi please do you do reading requests?. If you do please I would like you to check out my stories. It will mean a lot to me. Thanks

Published my very first book. Please read First Kiss!