Sketch-Tastic

I think your story is absolutely wonderful! The only advice I can give is to try and not repeat the same thought more than once. I’m a couple of places you put the same idea down twice with slightly altered phrasing. I do not think it is too complicated. Continue writing it and enjoying it. 
          Yours, Sketch 
          Ps. If you read and critique my stories please just stick with “The kingdom of wolves” for the others are old and poorly written.

Akira_diKallene

@Sketch-Tastic I'll be sure to keep your advice in mind. Thanks for your response, and I'll be sure to read your works. Have a nice day :)
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FromClyde

I love the Fallen Prince and notice you’re high on grammar and sentence structure!  I would appreciate it if you gave my story a look and gave some feedback, I’m always looking for ways to improve.  I’m new to Wattpad and just trying to make some friends in the community.  Thank you, and I’m looking forward to more of your works!

Akira_diKallene

@FromClyde Also, I would like to know how you came upon my story. This info will help me improve. Thanks again :)
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Akira_diKallene

@FromClyde Thank you, I appreciate you noticed. I map out dialogues and events then go deeper with the grammar and sentences. My manuscripts are the messiest. I would love to read your story and give some feedback on it, and in the meantime, please do keep on the lookout for new chapters. You got a friend right here mate
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jaller

Hi there, I saw you commented on my page in order to set up a critique for critique type deal. I’m fine with that! Did you want me to mainly look for clarity?

Akira_diKallene

@jaller What a coincidence, sentence structure is my strong point. I'll give you some tips and feedback too. Looking forward to your criticisms
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jaller

So, word choice and sentence structure are my main things, focusing on clarity and flow.
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jaller

I have heard from some people that my sentences can get a little hard to follow and my word choice is sometimes confusing. I love the story I have to tell but I would love feedback on making it clearer. I’ll start reading your first chapters tonight!
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