Alan_Crowe

Also, I dove deeper into Elle's mention of her Birthday dinner with her then-boyfriend, Scott. Elle finds herself nervous for her upcoming date with Hunter, its because in the past, she has been humiliated and disappointed by Scott when she thought he would step up and make her feel special. Scott falls in love with Elle because she makes him feel important, but Scott doesn't make her feel important in return. Elle's birthday fiasco is loosely based on an experience that I had with an ex. It was my birthday and I was excited that my boyfriend at the time was about to do the bare minimum and take me out to dinner. At the end of the night, like Elle, I found myself alone and eating a slice of birthday cake that we had to take to go. We ended up breaking up in the parking lot of the restaurant.

Alan_Crowe

Also, I dove deeper into Elle's mention of her Birthday dinner with her then-boyfriend, Scott. Elle finds herself nervous for her upcoming date with Hunter, its because in the past, she has been humiliated and disappointed by Scott when she thought he would step up and make her feel special. Scott falls in love with Elle because she makes him feel important, but Scott doesn't make her feel important in return. Elle's birthday fiasco is loosely based on an experience that I had with an ex. It was my birthday and I was excited that my boyfriend at the time was about to do the bare minimum and take me out to dinner. At the end of the night, like Elle, I found myself alone and eating a slice of birthday cake that we had to take to go. We ended up breaking up in the parking lot of the restaurant.

Alan_Crowe

If you are reading along to A Rare Find, Ch. 15 went through a few edits. I briefly mentioned the song Scott writes for Eleanor, Go-Go Girl. I went back and added what I envisioned his lyrics would be. The song, while about Elle in her white boots also touched upon Scott's addiction to cocaine. "My Girl, she stands in line", refers to Elle waiting in line at his shows but also references Scott doing lines.

Alan_Crowe

There's my girl standing in line.
            
            There's my girl, I spot her even under the stage lights. 
            
            She looks up at the band, her eyes as big as the moon.  
            
            I hope she will be mine, and I hope she will be soon.
            
            My siren as I go out to sea, bringing my ship down, crashing. I need her to bring me home, to her home below my stage.
            
            She dances to the music I play like she understands every word I can't quite say. She listens as I sing. The song is brand new, yet my girl already knows the words. Of course, she does, this song is about her.
            
            There's my girl but what she doesn't know, I already love her, and with her, I find my home, drowning in her light at the bottom of the black sea.
            
            Damn those beautiful big eyes, haunting as she looks to me, reminding me why I am still alive.
            
            Nobody does the things you do. My siren, the girl with the white, Go-Go boots. My girl. The one I go home to. 
            
            My girl, she still stands in line each night. She keeps me awake, all I see is her and white. My girl, she calls me into the sea of the crowd. I dip my nose toward her just to feel the power of her siren sounds. Her lips. Gasoline. No Breaks. Just Speed. Her touch. I'm home. I'm where I want to be. My girl,  wearing white dancing, making me a mad fool out of me while I sing to her from the stage and hand her my red tambourine.
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Alan_Crowe

If you are reading along to A Rare Find, the chapter Poor Little Eleanor Waylon went through some extensive dialogue edits. I had originally envisioned the characters having a snarky back and forth, not getting to into the real root of why Elle lashed out. After publishing this version I wanted to go deeper.  The characters are just getting know eachother, but want to know more. This is their first real argument, springing from Elle's own insecurities. Hunter on the receiving end of Elle's words realizes there is something more to what Elle is trying to say. Deep down, she doesn't feel good enough and she is afraid that Hunter will turn out to be the villain just like Scott had. He lets her know by saying, "I won't let you paint me to be the villain. I am not him!" Hunter is referring to the portrait of Scott. Elle is scared. I think we all are scared to fall for someone or let our guard down after being utterly disappointed by someone we love. Please go give it a read and let me know your thoughts!

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https://www.wattpad.com/story/247865618-the-way-to-the-empire%27s-heart-16%2B-vore
            
            @FlameonLeaf  asked me to add this to your chat
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